Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Cauley

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Cauley

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:35, August 12, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:07, September 7, 2015 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:06, November 4, 2015 (UTC)
  3. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 08:27, November 8, 2015 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 03:56, November 28, 2015 (UTC)
  5. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 15:42, December 6, 2015 (UTC)

Object

  • BTS - mentioning that A New Dawn was the first Canon novel might be a good idea. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 21:57, August 19, 2015 (UTC)
  • Looking over it again, I'm seeing items that should probably have links/articles, like ID transponder, headset, etc.
    • Added links and articles. Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:06, August 30, 2015 (UTC)
  • The ending feels a little truncated; Vidian betrayed Empire, gets killed in an explosion. But how did he betray the Empire, and did the baradium destroy Forager? I know that it might be too much detail to go into in Cauley's article, but if small clarifications can be made without spinning off on tangents, that would help. - Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 01:14, August 28, 2015 (UTC)
    • Added a bit more detail, but I feel anything more isn't relevant to Cauley. Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:06, August 30, 2015 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • The article alternates between "the Ultimatum" and "Ultimatum". Which does the novel use? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:27, November 4, 2015 (UTC)
  • Please confirm also for Cynda Dreaming and Moonglow-72.
  • Please create an article for a fighter wing to fix the resulting redirect.
  • Never, ever, ever use contractions in formal writing. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:27, November 4, 2015 (UTC)
Jorrel
  • "Immediately after exiting hyperspace, Ultimatum nearly collided with a freighter named Cynda Dreaming, which clipped the larger vessel as it narrowly dodged." - Can you clarify which of the ships dodged? The it could refer to either ship.
  • Similarly, "However, a group of rebels, including the pilot Kanan Jarrus, had learned of the plan. Aboard the freighter Moonglow-72, they began destroying the TIE fighters guarding the baradium haulers and then initiated harassing fire on the haulers themselves, preventing them from delivering their loads and scaring the pilots." contains a few indeterminate pronouns that could be cleaned up. Suggestion:
    "However, a group of rebels, including the pilot Kanan Jarrus, had learned of the plan, and, aboard the freighter Moonglow-72, began destroying the TIE fighters guarding the baradium haulers. The rebel group then initiated harassing fire on the haulers themselves, preventing the convoy from delivering their loads and scaring the pilots."
    • I've used your suggested text, thank! Ayrehead02 (talk) 00:06, November 8, 2015 (UTC)
  • Not a true objection, but I believe a picture exists for Ultimatum... at least, according to our article. I suppose, since it's from the cover of the novel, it could be any ISD, but I'm not familiar with the novel itself so I defer to you on that. Anyway, I think the picture could fit into the History section. Your choice. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 08:37, November 7, 2015 (UTC)
    • Given that it's the only ISD that appears in the book I think It's a reasonable assumption that the image is correct. Ayrehead02 (talk) 00:06, November 8, 2015 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • Do we know when the events of the novel took place? It would be nice to have an indication of the time in the article. Make sure to provide adequate sourcing for the date.--Exiled Jedi (talk) 15:32, November 21, 2015 (UTC)
    • The book itself didn't, but turns out the visual guide did indirectly give a date. Added now. Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:54, November 21, 2015 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • Unsourced quote in the introduction. 1358 (Talk) 01:52, November 29, 2015 (UTC)
    • I didn't even realise that was possible. Fixed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:49, November 29, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by AgriCorps 15:42, December 6, 2015 (UTC)