Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Caregg Oldathan

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Caregg Oldathan

  • Nominated by: 501st dogma(talk) 18:39, September 7, 2015 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: 927 words. Let's try to keep this one from FANing.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 20:32, September 8, 2015 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 15:32, September 9, 2015 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 03:43, September 21, 2015 (UTC)
  4. ACvote IFYLOFD (Talk) 21:50, October 12, 2015 (UTC)
  5. --Eyrezer (talk) 14:01, October 19, 2015 (UTC)
  6. Trip391 (talk) 05:02, October 24, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Omicron

  • Can you reword the second paragraph of Discovering a cloaked asteroid? "a nickel-iron asteroid massing millions of tons" doesn't sound right. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 18:55, September 7, 2015 (UTC)
    • How so? 501st dogma(talk) 19:03, September 7, 2015 (UTC)
      • How about "with a mass of millions of tons" Massing as a verb usually means to come together as a group. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 19:24, September 7, 2015 (UTC)
        • Yeah, upon looking up massing, the online dictionaries are only using it for groups, so I've changed it to your suggestion. 501st dogma(talk) 00:44, September 8, 2015 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • The sourcing for the Commenor image is insufficient. Use the FFCite template and specify the exact section of the issue that image appears in.
    • Though I was just using an already existing image for the article, I've corrected the sourcing. However, it turns out that the images is from FF 88, and not FF 80. Is there a way to move the image to a new name? The current name is Commenor FF80.jpg, which is not correct.
      • It's still your responsibility to make sure all images in the article are properly sourced, per the nomination rules. I've moved the image title accordingly. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 15:32, September 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • Is "decloak" a word used in sources? I'd like you to confirm this before we use it ourselves.
    • Nope, I've gotten rid of it.
  • In this sentence, would it be accurate to word the second clause to say "including rumors of Commenori entertaining themselves with bloodsports"? This would only work if that was mentioned as a violation of the rules of war: "Oldathan was disturbed by signs that both sides of the Second Galactic Civil War were ignoring some parts of the interplanetary rules of war, and rumors of Commenori entertaining themselves with bloodsports bothered him." Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 05:37, September 9, 2015 (UTC)
    • I don't believe so. There is mention of harsher POW treatment, but it is not connected to bloodsports directly. If the POWs were being used for the bloodsports then it would work, but it could just be animal fighting, which probably isn't covered in the rules of war. 501st dogma(talk) 14:13, September 9, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 15:37, October 24, 2015 (UTC)