Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Camp Three (Serroco)

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Camp Three (Serroco)

Nominated by: IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 05:38, June 11, 2014 (UTC)
Nomination comments: One of these days I'm going to cut you into little pieces!

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

I would only ask for links to the Stereb city and the control tower, but I leave it up to you to decide if they are important enough to warrant articles. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 11:02, June 11, 2014 (UTC)
Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:50, June 15, 2014 (UTC)
--Emperor Jarjarkine Senate Hall 00:41, June 16, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 04:27, June 27, 2014 (UTC)
MasterFred^(Whatever) 06:53, June 28, 2014 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 03:29, July 2, 2014 (UTC)

Object

praguepride

~~Shouldn't the text in the comic panels be removed? --praguepride ^(Talk) 13:54, June 12, 2014 (UTC)~~
~~In History section: "threatened the[1] Expansion Region[4]" Should the [1] reference be moved to someplace other then the middle of the sentance?~~ --praguepride ^(Talk) 13:54, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
- Allow me to explain: Reference 1 is needed since Reference 4 can only source the location, not that the planet was threatened. If you have a question, don't hesitate to ask me or the users on IRC. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 15:34, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
  - Yeah, there's nothing wrong here. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 03:20, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
    - It's not the link, it's the location of the link. If it is supporting the threat then put it after threatened. If it's supporting the planet, put it at the end. Right now you're referencing 'The' which looks really weird to me :( --praguepride ^(Talk) 10:14, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
      - Well, regardless of whether it looks weird, that's the proper place to put it. Reference 4 can only source the fact that Serroco was in the Expansion Region, nothing else. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 15:29, June 13, 2014 (UTC)
        Ugh...just...ugh!--praguepride ^(Talk) 04:50, June 16, 2014 (UTC)
In history section, consider rewording " The missiles angled around the Republic fleet, aimed at the camps all along," The "aimed at the camps all along" feels weird because it was never mentioned what the missiles were targeting in the first place. Either remove or mention that they shot at the Republic fleet but then curved to hit the camps. --praguepride ^(Talk) 13:55, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
- Done.
~~Behind the Scenes - missing the illustrator?~~ --praguepride ^(Talk) 13:55, June 12, 2014 (UTC)
- Mentioned. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 03:20, June 13, 2014 (UTC)

Emperor's advice

~~tyere is 2 dupplicate links on the bdoy. Should be fx.Emperor Jarjarkine Senate Hall~~
- Fixed, but as a general rule, if it's something as minor as that, just fix it yourself. {{Sofixit}}. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 04:25, June 14, 2014 (UTC)
  - ~~sorry i was sure we couldnt. Was the call i did was okay?Emperor Jarjarkine~~ Senate Hall
    - Uh... sure? IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 23:15, June 14, 2014 (UTC)

Toprawa

It appears to me that the BBY dates provided in this article cannot be sourced to the individual comic issues and need a more specific source. I notice the comic issue articles source their dates to external links, for example.
- Actually, they can. The first page of every KOTOR issue gives a BBY date.
~~In the "History" quote, is the comma meant to be italicized?~~ Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:51, June 26, 2014 (UTC)
- Yup. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 23:25, June 26, 2014 (UTC)

Exiled Jedi

~~The description paragraph seems a little long. Could you break it up?~~
~~"Perturbed, Carrick decided that he needed to warn Carrick..." I doubt this is correct.~~--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 01:33, July 1, 2014 (UTC)
- Both fixed. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 03:28, July 2, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:29, July 2, 2014 (UTC)