Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Camo scout armor

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Camo scout armor

  • Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 17:33, September 19, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My first item (droids and ships notwithstanding) is this thing from the RPG. Never included in the gear owned by a player or not-player character.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. sweet, one of my created articles gets nominated.<-Omicron 22:17, September 19, 2010 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Cylka-talk- 18:59, October 9, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote --Eyrezer 10:19, October 19, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Menkooroo 12:44, October 23, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 07:34, October 25, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Cylka
  • the suit blended into the background. - This is a bit awkward. I would recommend adding in something about the sensors causing the color to change.
  • To do, using common armor technology,[8] several hard plates were woven into the fabric of a[9] body glove armor. - This sentence is rather confusing.
  • The camo armor based its marketing advantage[5] in a technology of - This reads a bit awkwardly. I suggest rewriting to say that their marketing campaign was based on a technological advantage, if I am reading this sentence correctly.
  • I'm not sure that a one sentence paragraph is needed in the description section. Please incorporate it somewhere.
  • I removed the link to scout in the bolded title, since we don't link there. Therefore, I think that you should discuss this armor being classified as scout and medium armor somewhere in the article, since it is in the infobox.
  • I'm not entirely sure if that last item in the Bts, about the starship cloaking device, is needed. Looking through the armor category and subcategory, there are a few "cloaking" type armors. Also there are a few stealth and cloaking belts.
  • Otherwise, interesting item. Cylka-talk- 09:56, October 9, 2010 (UTC)
  • Eyrezer: I think you should include the prices in the body of the article. --Eyrezer 23:11, October 9, 2010 (UTC)
Cav
  • Okay, I'm a little confused. The main image and the one of the camo armor is use are totally different from one another. In fact, the main image looks more like the armor image from Rules of Engagement p.34, which I think is meant to be light scout armor. I think the Arms and Equipment guide may have mixed up the sources. Something should be put in the BTS about this, noting the discrepancy in images.
  • The camo armor was first mentioned in the supplement Galaxy Guide 10: Bounty Hunters (1994), written by Rick D. Stuart for West End Games' Star Wars: The Roleplaying Game, with an illustration by Chris Trevas. Chris Trevas didn't provide an image of the armor - in fact, no image of the armor is in GG10 as far as I'm aware - for Galaxy Guide 10. I think you mean he illustrated it for the Arms & Equipment guide. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:38, October 13, 2010 (UTC)
Cav, part 2
  • Is there any chance of including the light scout armor image from from previous objection in the article? Or, at the very least, creating an article for the light scout armor (if one doesn't already exist) and link to that so that we can see the comparison between the images? - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 10:15, October 19, 2010 (UTC)
Jeff

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 07:34, October 25, 2010 (UTC)