Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Calson

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Calson

  • Nominated by: Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:45, September 8, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Important lesson #673 - listen to women or you die.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote -- 1358 (Talk) 12:02, September 8, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Menkooroo 13:02, September 8, 2010 (UTC)
  3. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 23:52, September 8, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Ain't that the truth?—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:43, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 16:46, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
  6. ACvote You have your priorities straight. :P Cylka-talk- 05:01, September 11, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Calson
  • Even with its short length, the article still feels too pbp at times, specifically in terms of "Gorjaye said, Calson stated, Gorjaye told him", etc. I sofixed one case, but I was wondering if "When Gorjaye told him that he was coming with her, and that it was an order" might be better as simply "When Gorjaye ordered him to come with her".
    • Changed as per suggestion.
  • Can you take care of the one-sentence paragraph in the bts?
    • Lengthened to a two sentence paragraph.
  • Should sources 1 and 3 be the same source? Also, there's exclusive info in that source and no indication of where it's from --- in other words, can you source that source? :^D Menkooroo 12:28, September 8, 2010 (UTC)
    • No, since sources 1 and 3 relate to the logical reasoning for the entries in the infobox using the data available. Each is for a different reason, but I've rewritten the refs to hopefully avoid confusion. As for the unique info - its from Gorjaye's bio in The DarkStryder Campaign which is linked to in the ref, but is now stated clearer. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 12:57, September 8, 2010 (UTC)
Jujiggum
  • Since the planet is not actually noted as being "unidentified" IU, then the "unidentified" needs to be removed from the infobox.
    • Removed.
  • "On the ground, Calson refused to take orders from Gorjaye when she ordered him to fall in line and follow her to a nearby settlement because she was a woman." Please reorder the sentence; grammatically this says that Gorjaye told him to follow her because she was a woman, rather than saying that Calson refused to follow her orders because she was a woman. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 15:21, September 9, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 11:50, September 15, 2010 (UTC)