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CT-4/619

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Watch out for spelling errors, I corrected quite a few. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:39, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:30, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:39, June 7, 2012 (UTC)
  4. ACvote JangFett (Talk) 03:11, June 10, 2012 (UTC)
  5. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 22:45, June 10, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • Wasn't CT-4/619 the clone with whom Fett spoke before they were transported to Cloud City? If it is so, mention it in bio and intro.
  • That the superweapon on Raxus Prime is the Dark Reaper is not mentioned in the book, so please source correctly.
  • You can mention his exploits in the fight for the P&T and if he is the one mentioned in my first objection then add something from that encounter too.
  • Good work. Clone Commander Lee Talk 08:29, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
  • One more: Upon arrival, CT-4/619 de-militerized the lander that would take the orphans down by painting out all military related markings on the craft, as Bespin wanted no signs of war. : The last part is bothering me here. I do not believe that the planet wanted no signs of war. You could say that the officials of the world were neutral and therefore no war signs are allowed. Oh and please give context for Cloud City. Clone Commander Lee Talk 12:59, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
    • I've contexted Cloud City and neutralfied Bespin. 501st DogmaRepublic emblem(Comlink) 13:28, April 15, 2012 (UTC)
Jangston
  • Reload your infobox
    • Done.
  • "CT-4/619 was part of a clone strike force that landed on the surface near to where the Separatist-aligned Sith Lord Count Dooku's headquarters were located." Check your grammar here
    • Done.
      • Could we get a link for Dooku's headquarters? JangFett (Talk) 22:34, April 23, 2012 (UTC)
        • Done.
  • "CT-4/619 worked on de-militarizing the hull of the lander that would take the orphans down from the ship." I'm not understand you here. So what exactly did he do to demilitarize the ship? Did he take out weaponry, ect? I think the "down from the ship" is most confusing here.
    • Better?
  • For the biography quote, by saying CT-4/619 first, it sounds like that he said "Impossible!" but I don't think this is the case. Since this is a two-speaker quote, you need to mention who spoke what first, then followed by the second speaker in the attribution field. So as an example, if Luke says something before Han in a two-speaker quote, it would be "Luke Skywalker and Han Solo" in the attribution field.
  • Again, to say CT was a clone then clone trooper when you're introducing him in the bio is redundant. The readers are aware that he is a clone trooper.
    • Better? I pipelinked it to read trooper instide.
      • Now you're implying that he was born as a trooper. Do you mean he was trained as one? JangFett (Talk) 22:34, April 23, 2012 (UTC)
        • Better?
          • Still remains. Also you could split that sentence into two. JangFett (Talk) 15:50, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
            • Done. 501st dogma(talk) 16:00, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
  • "CT-4/619 was one of the many clones of the bounty hunter Jango Fett born on the planet Kamino as a clone trooper in the Galactic Republic's Grand Army, and he fought in the Clone Wars between the Republic and the Confederacy of Independent Systems." Also, it sounds like CT fought with both the Republic and CIS during the Clone Wars. This sentence could be removed since you begin what CT did during the war in the following sentence.
    • I clarified it but did not remove it.
  • "The squad's number down to three plus Fett," Are you naming the squad's number as in troops + Fett? It's quite confusing as it stands.
    • Done, I think.
  • Since you mentioned that CT and Boba entered the LAAT/i in the intro, it's currently missing in the bio.
    • Added.
  • Could you give some detail about the questions Boba wanted answered? At the moment, it's odd that it's only briefly mentioned without suggesting what the questions were or why CT was talking to Boba if he's the pilot of the LAAT.
    • Already in there. "CT-4/619 answered Fett's questions about the Candasserri..". I clarified where Boba was sitting.
      • Yes, but what exactly was the question? You could mention this in the P&T since it has no place in the bio. JangFett (Talk) 22:34, April 23, 2012 (UTC)
        • Added to P&T.
  • "and proceeded to dock the gunship in one of its hangars, taking the orphan to Jedi Glynn-Beti and her Padawan Ulu Ulix before seeing to his duties in the hangar" The last clause does not work in this sentence since he's proceeding to land then you say he took Fett to the Jedi. I don't think he did this while landing.
    • Better?
  • "and had the basic look of Jango Fett" Did the novel describe his looks? If not, you are speculating.
    • Removed.
  • Do you need his entry in the CSWE or do you have it? Utilizing the {{CSWECite}} in the sources could work too. JangFett (Talk) 01:13, April 18, 2012 (UTC)
    • I have access to it on Forum:Entry requests, and its a sentence. Why do you ask?
      • In case you did not check. Also, you could use the CSWECite source. JangFett (Talk) 22:34, April 23, 2012 (UTC)
        • Added.
          • Also, you could fix that ref tag that includes a CSWE source. JangFett (Talk) 15:50, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
            • Done. 501st dogma(talk) 16:00, May 20, 2012 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • "Along with Fett, the squad's remaining troopers went down to three." Could you word this so that it is more clear what is going on? The way it is currently worded, I am unsure what you are trying to say. Are there two clones and Boba left? Does this include CT-4/619?
  • Could you explain why they are waiting for CT-5/501?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 01:05, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
    • Explained. Thanks for looking it over. 501st dogma(talk) 20:11, May 31, 2012 (UTC)
The clone
  • Is there any more information on this "lander" that can be put into the article? Ideally, it should have an article, being a type of ship or at least a colloquial term for one.
    • Article created. There was not much more in the book. 501st dogma(talk) 22:41, June 10, 2012 (UTC)
  • Please make sure to watch linking—all articles should be linked upon their first mention in the article. Also, please keep an eye out for small errors like "orbiting in Raxus Prime." CC7567 (talk) 22:08, June 10, 2012 (UTC)
    • Ok, thanks for pointing that out and reviewing it. 501st dogma(talk) 22:41, June 10, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:45, June 10, 2012 (UTC)