Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Boles Roor/Legends

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Boles Roor

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Good work. IFYLOFD (And now, young Skywalker, you will die.) 16:14, 17 December 2008 (UTC)
  2. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is a lie) 06:44, 25 December 2008 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Chack Jadson (Talk) 13:48, 4 January 2009 (UTC)
  4. ACvote - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 15:55, 8 January 2009 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:28, 10 January 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. IFYLOFD:
    • Intro could probably be expanded.

Good work. IFYLOFD (And now, young Skywalker, you will die.) 01:31, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

  1. Chack Attack
    • You use "Roor" too many times in the intro. Try using "the Sneevel" or something.
      • Have a look. "The Sneevel" and "he".
    • "in front of a full house." We try to avoid using words like "probably" in this context. If you can't confirm it, I suggest removing it, or changing it to "often in front of a full house" or something (dunno if that's OR, though).
      • Rephrased. Source does not specify that Roor sang in front a full house, but I think it tries to suggest that Roor and Janna did.
    • "Roor's podracing skills were not competitive as of 32 BBY, even though they could have been better in his times." I don't understand this sentence. Could you rephrase it?
      • See if I explained it better now.
    • Very good article. Chack Jadson (Talk) 13:56, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
  2. Toprawa:
    • Unsourced infobox item, for starters. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:56, 6 January 2009 (UTC)
      • Done.
    • The article never mentions what type of racer he used, only leaving this information respective to the infobox.
      • Done.
        • Whoops, I meant "respective to the introduction," but it seems you were able to understand. Sorry for any confusion. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:17, 9 January 2009 (UTC)
    • The Biography section would definitely benefit from subsectioning. Maybe some more quotes, too?
      • Done, but there are not too many available quotes. I'd rather not add than add a bad one.
    • Please avoid the weasel word "apparently" and decide on this. He either was or wasn't a mediocre mechanic: "Roor apparently was a mediocre mechanic."
      • Done.
    • There is no other information from Episode I Racer? I know there are a lot of different tracks and racing scenarios. Roor doesn't participate in the storyline in any of these?
      • Unlike other games such as Bounty Hunter or KOTOR, Episode I: Racer has little plot, and even then little of it can be considered canon because it is simply a podrace simulator. Racer mentions a "favorite" and "champion" for each circuit, but the player can run wherever she wants and the results or the details of the race would not be canon at all (Specially if "my" Roor falls through a cliff and then "magically" appears back on the track five valuable seconds later; or "the winners of the 32 BBY Aquilaris Classic are X, Y and Z", as it would depend on the player's performance). You can get other canon information by comparing the pods (Roor's pod has low cooling when compared to Mars Guo? Then, canon says Roor's pod has worse cooling than Guo's), and in some cases FodesinBeed's opinion on certain racers can be heard in sound bits (Roor's isn't revelant). Last canon bit I can get from that game: Anakin Skywalker knows how to hum John Williams's Star Wars main theme. About the rest of the game, I don't know how to add any of it to the plot.
        • What I was thinking was, for example, if you played as Anakin throughout each level, and if Roor appears in each race, you can at the very least say that he participated in whatever races. I'm not sure how the game decides what racers appear in each level, if they are randomly chosen, or what. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:17, 9 January 2009 (UTC)
          • I have not found a pattern for "NPC pilots appearing in each circuit", except that the circuit's favorite runs as NPC if the player does not play as him (and even then, it might be a coincidence). I think it's random. Anyway, it is hard to verify, as the pilots are not listed, you only see their pods while passing them.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 21:50, 9 January 2009 (UTC)
    • The Personality and traits section could definitely be beefed up. You could mention the following:
      • He wore clothes, but sang naked.
      • He's wearing some kind of jewelery in his infobox picture.
        • Not done with reason: The only available images of Sneevels are Roor's. Descriptions of the species's biology or of Roor fail to mention the jewelry. Without confirmation, I am not sure whether he is wearing jewelry or he is showing some natural feature of his species, such as external bones or organs, or a knot of different-color hair. Maybe all the Sneevels tie their hair that way.
      • There are many good bits from his Databank entry, including being a "capable pilot."
      • Considered podracing to be more of a hobby to his singing career
      • Databank calls him "full of himself" and "blusterous" in taunting Quadinaros.
      • He's described as physically shaggy.
      • Could also repeat that he preferred to use his type of racer despite it being outdated.
        • Others: Done.
    • Reference note 16, the link to the Hyperspace page, no longer works. StarWars.com seems to have taken down many of these pages, but they can still be found using the Internet Archive, I do believe. Please look into this. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:25, 6 January 2009 (UTC)
      • Not done. The hyperspace link does not seem to be available on the Internet archive; I added the best I could find.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:04, 9 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:28, 10 January 2009 (UTC)