Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Bokar

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Bokar

  • Nominated by: —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 17:07, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: "Oh, Irony…" Part the 2

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:50, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
  2. ACvote—Tommy 9281 18:09, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Master Jonathan New Jedi Order (Jedi Council Chambers) 20:26, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Yahoo! Menkooroo 00:17, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:34, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
  6. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 12:45, December 7, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Toprawa
  • The intro quote attribution could use some tweakage. Try to give a brief mention whom the "he" and "his daughter" is referring to. Mentioning Yuln's name in the attribution is irrelevant.
  • Is the following happening during their search on Agamar? Please give some brief context for when and where this is happening: "Three days after the Sith–Imperials ambush of Fel and the Jedi, Bokar was informed by Yuln that all the remaining Jedi and Imperial Knights were dead."
    • Please try it.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:11, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
      • This objection has really only been half resolved. It still doesn't give any real context as to where this is happening. Are they discussing this as they're walking across Agamar looking for survivors, for example? Please explain this. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:25, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
  • Arguing how? Please do a little bit more to describe the substance of their debate: "The two Sith began arguing about the Sith, Jedi, and Imperial Knights who had perished during the battle"
  • Why not mention his earring/jewelry in the P/T?
  • This article refers to the character's tattoos as Sith tattoos, but Yuln's article does not. Is there any reason for this discrepancy? Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:08, November 30, 2010 (UTC)
    • Please try it, and thanks for the review.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:11, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
Xd1358
  • The wording of this article is very similar to that of Yuln. Can you go through this article and make some different wording choices? 1358 (Talk) 22:23, December 4, 2010 (UTC)
    • Please try it.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 20:12, December 6, 2010 (UTC)
      • The intro is still too similar. Can you please vary it? 1358 (Talk) 20:19, December 6, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 12:45, December 7, 2010 (UTC)