Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Biscuit Baron

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Biscuit Baron

Nominated by: ^Jorrel_Fraajic 19:26, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
Nomination comments: My return to writing shall be commemorated by a massive amount of clogged arteries and cardiac arrest!

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

A minor spelling/grammar edit, and I like it. I'll be watching when it goes FA. Enochf 02:40, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
Just an image text full stop edit for me. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 09:09, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
Mmmm. Ardees. IFYLOFD ^{(And now, young Skywalker, you will die.)} 18:43, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
Chack Jadson^(Talk) 02:12, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
—Tommy9281 ^{(Peace is a lie)} 01:56, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

Object

Concrete Jungle:
- In the intro, you talk about the restaurant's prominence during the Galactic Empire days before you talk about it during the Seperatist Crisis and Clone Wars. I'd like to see it reworked to be in chronological order please.
  - Discussed in IRC. I have it arranged in such a way that it tackles the individual sections rather than chronologically, because I feel having the mention of the holocrons above the fact that it was the largest restaurant chain in the galaxy seems wonky, at least in the intro. While I understand, I'd like a second (third?) opinion from another member. :)
    - I have to agree with Jorrel here. The fact that it was the largest restaurant chain is important enough to be stated first rather than near the end of the intro. Also, the individual sectioning in the intro works very well, and is comprehensive enough for the average reader to understand. DC 18:44, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
      - Lol, DC. I concede.—Tommy9281 ^{(Peace is a lie)} 01:56, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
- ~~This problem persists throughout the "Description" section. Please amend.~~
  - See above.
- I enjoyed this.—Tommy9281 ^{(Peace is a lie)} 04:40, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
  - Then I did my job. :D Glad you had fun with it. ^Jorrel_Fraajic 17:09, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
    - Also, it's possible I might just move it straight to FA, so if I do, I'll drag the objection alog as well. Koovy? ^Jorrel_Fraajic 17:14, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
IFYLOFD:
- ~~No infobox source for Roridan Temquill being the leader of Biscuit Baron.~~
  - Referenced.
- I want myself a good cup of Ardees. IFYLOFD ^{(And now, young Skywalker, you will die.)} 02:21, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
  - Done. ^Jorrel_Fraajic 02:37, 27 November 2008 (UTC)

Comments

A little under 900 words, at last check. I'd have been able to FA this if more than 3 of its sources weren't mere namedrops. :| ^Jorrel_Fraajic 19:26, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
- 992, by my count. Expand that intro, boy! Thefourdotelipsis 11:26, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
  - Giant Amorphous Bantha Breakfast Biscuit deserves a mention, which should push the word count over 1,000. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 11:40, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
    - Added a bit about the Amorphus Bantha Biscuit in both intro and body (under Products). Should I move it to FA now, or let it sit here for a bit? ^Jorrel_Fraajic 17:14, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
      - If I were you, Jorrel, I'd let this sit for a week and see if it passes (or is close to passing) in that time. If not, you could pull it off and take it to FA, but since you've got it here, you might want to leave it here and get possible objections fixed before taking it to FA. Chack Jadson^(Talk) 18:49, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
        Keep it going till it passes. It's close enough. DC 18:55, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
        See how patience pays off? ;)—Tommy9281 ^{(Peace is a lie)} 01:56, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:55, 29 November 2008 (UTC)