Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Battle of Tiems

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Battle of Tiems

• Nominated by: Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 09:55, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: I know its over 1,000 words, but I want to work the kinks out of this one before taking it to FAN.

(2 ACs/4 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 16:37, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
2. Nice work. Grunny ^(Talk) 14:50, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
3. Goodwood ^{(Alliance Intelligence)} 23:16, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
4. A good read. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 05:26, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
5. DC 16:37, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
6. Cylka^-talk- 04:46, 31 January 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. Three small things:
   • The last two sentences in the second "Aftermath" paragraph seem a bit redundant.
     • Switched it to the third paragraph, and tried to contextualize its importance.
   • I'd like to see the "Prelude", "The battle" and "Aftermath" sections merged into a History section, but will leave that up to you.
     • All other battle articles attaining GA/FA status are structured this way, so I followed the established trend.
       • Fair enough.
   • Use of the word "force(s)" is a bit too frequent, particularly in the intro.
     • Tried to mix it up a little.
   • Keep up the good work mate!--Goodwood ^{(Alliance Intelligence)} 05:07, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
     • Thanks - got more out of this one than I expected. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 12:44, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
       • Funny how these things work out. :-) Goodwood ^{(Alliance Intelligence)} 23:16, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 04:46, 31 January 2009 (UTC)