Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Battle of Talay (Great Galactic War)

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Battle of Talay (Great Galactic War)

• Nominated by: Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 19:28, October 1, 2013 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. Bah! To me, the Battle of Talay will always be garbled ROTJ footage of Ackbar! Thefourdotelipsis (talk) 05:54, October 22, 2013 (UTC)
2. Winterz (talk) 23:26, December 5, 2013 (UTC)
3. Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:47, December 10, 2013 (UTC)
4. Sorry about the delay - forgot about this. :P 501st dogma^(talk) 20:56, December 10, 2013 (UTC)
5. IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 01:37, December 16, 2013 (UTC)
6. Supreme Emperor (talk) 15:56, December 21, 2013 (UTC)
7. CC7567 ^(talk) 18:53, December 26, 2013 (UTC)

Object

501st

• "However, the newly instated commanding officer Broysc would be among the first to attempt to penetrate the Republic worlds of the Mid Rim[1] at some point prior to 3,677 BBY." I'm confused as to why we start with however here. Is it bad that Borysc led an attack.
  • Reworded for clarity.
• Did the officer really make them lose? If so, it should be stated directly.
  • Which officer are you referring to? Broysc? Because the article doesn't at all indicate that he made them lose. If you're referring to Quinn, the final sentence of the Aftermath makes it pretty clear it wasn't him.
    • The quote to the intro makes it seem like Quinn`s master is telling him that Broysc made them lose. If this is not the case, clarify in the context, as it is a bit confusing. 501st dogma^(talk) 20:50, October 8, 2013 (UTC)
      • Check it out now. I split up the quote to clarify. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 17:39, October 17, 2013 (UTC)
• Context on Talay: is it a planet, moon, space station? 501st dogma^(talk) 00:01, October 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • Added. Thanks for the review. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 10:29, October 8, 2013 (UTC)

Ayrehead

• "Regardless of the Moff's insistence, the Quinn had not yet been born when the battle occurred'" I think there might be an unneeded the in there. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:56, December 8, 2013 (UTC)
  • Correct, it's been removed. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 16:37, December 10, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 18:53, December 26, 2013 (UTC)