Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Balance stabilizer

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Balance stabilizer

• Nominated by: Editoronthewiki (talk) 21:21, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Yep, grew too big for a CA :P
• Date Archived: 01:14, 13 May 2024 (UTC)
• Final word count: 408 words (71 introduction, 306 body, 31 behind the scenes)
• Word count at nomination time: 493 words (71 introduction, 391 body, 31 behind the scenes)
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:CIS, WP:THR

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Support

1. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 21:48, 7 May 2024 (UTC)
2. —spookywilloww^talk 16:33, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
3. Lewisr (talk) 16:52, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
4. Master Fredcerique(talk) (he/him) 01:13, 13 May 2024 (UTC)

Object

Lew

• Redlink:P Lewisr (talk) 21:36, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
  • I legitimately cannot believe I missed that Editoronthewiki (talk) 21:37, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Page made! Editoronthewiki (talk) 21:47, 19 April 2024 (UTC)
    • It happens sometimes, but thanks! Lewisr (talk) 01:08, 20 April 2024 (UTC)

Macaroni

• The last sentence of the intro is a fragment. Try saying it out loud. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 21:24, 5 May 2024 (UTC)
  • Fixed !Editoronthewiki (talk) 01:14, 6 May 2024 (UTC)

spookly

• Been mulling on this for a few weeks now with some other folk but I do strongly feel like a few tidbits of context need to be trimmed out here. For only a single mention (in which the stabilizers themselves are not actually present) two paragraphs is too much.
  • Firstly, "…while departing from the Mudfields of Bororn. Unable to directly jump to lightspeed to their next destination, the planet Temerancé, without changing course, Yorrick" can be trimmed out because that's not relevant to the technology, slightly altered to "she decided to fly directly&ehllip;" to merge those sentences.
    • Thoughts? Editoronthewiki (talk) 15:47, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
      • Works, thanks.—spookywilloww^talk 16:33, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
  • Secondly, "the Occlusion Zone of the galaxy controlled by the Nihil marauders"—I feel like this is somewhat slightly too wordy for what it needs to be. We have a lot of OZ SAs and they just go "the Nihil marauders' Occlusion Zone" or "the Nihil-controlled Occlusion Zone"
    • Fixed Editoronthewiki (talk) 15:47, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
  • "However, as the lack of Jedi in the Occlusion Zone had granted her a boom in business, Yorrick was unconcerned because they had the money needed for repairs."—it would be, imo, much more relevant to cut this sentence and instead tack onto the one before it something like ", allowing them to escape." and just ending it there. If the stabilizers themselves were in this scene, it would be relevant, but instead it's just a shout of "hold onto your balance stabilizers" which, is pretty vague, and not relevant to the technology itself (especially given the general level of detail expected from technology articles).—spookywilloww^talk 17:26, 9 May 2024 (UTC)
    • Removed Editoronthewiki (talk) 15:47, 12 May 2024 (UTC)
  • All addressed! Editoronthewiki (talk) 15:47, 12 May 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 01:13, 13 May 2024 (UTC)