Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Azool Phantelle

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Azool Phantelle

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 17:39, September 5, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Max Rebo's rogue brother was too good a character to pass up

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:54, September 7, 2018 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 16:56, September 8, 2018 (UTC)
  3. Fan26 (Talk) 14:49, September 11, 2018 (UTC)
  4. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 18:39, September 11, 2018 (UTC)
  5. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:08, September 15, 2018 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Exiled Jedi (talk) 17:26, September 15, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Fan26
  • The only thing I noticed was this line: " pulled his brother onboard out of harms way." Something about the way it slides from onboard to "out of harms way" feels off, though that could just be me. Also, I think it should be "harm's". Other than that, everything is good. Fan26 (Talk) 00:22, September 7, 2018 (UTC)
    • How's it look now? Ayrehead02 (talk) 05:47, September 7, 2018 (UTC)
      • That's good, thanks! Sorry it took a so long to get back to this! Fan26 (Talk) 14:47, September 11, 2018 (UTC)
Tommy
  • "During the reign of the Galactic Empire, he swindled several of the inhabitants of the spaceport of Mos Eisley on the planet Tatooine then had to save Rebo from his victims, who had mistaken the musician for his brother." This runs on a bit, could you at least add some commas?
    • I've split the sentence, any good? Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:44, September 7, 2018 (UTC)
  • "and believed his brother was too afraid of letting go." Letting go of what?
    • I've no idea, that quote is pretty much all he says on the matter. Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:44, September 7, 2018 (UTC)
  • Can we get some context for Adventures 13 please. Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:17, September 7, 2018 (UTC)
QGJ
  • In the intro, can you substitute some of the "then"s? It gets kinda repetitive when used in every sentence. He then had to save Rebo…and then threw the criminal's stolen money…The Hutt crime lord Jabba Desilijic Tiure then learned QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 09:29, September 14, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 17:27, September 15, 2018 (UTC)