Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Assault on the Aparo sector

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Assault on the Aparo sector

  • Nominated by: Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 03:27, February 16, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: A short article for a short mention.

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 07:48, February 21, 2010 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Chack Jadson (Talk) 16:46, February 21, 2010 (UTC)
  3. JangFett (Talk) 18:26, February 21, 2010 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Keep up the good work. Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 18:32, February 21, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:24, February 23, 2010 (UTC)

Object

  1. Fett
    • "Instead of combating the Empire alongside its allies, the Republic fleet was caught within enemy territory, fighting for survival." This sentences needs clarifying. You mentioned that the Republic had lost its allies in the previous sentence, but now you say the Republic 'may still have allies.
      • Check it out. I'm thinking the abrupt transition might have caused the misinterpretation, but if it's still unclear let me know.
        • Better, but it still sounds like the Republic still has those allies and would still fight alongside them, though, they fell to the Sith Empire. Or are there other allies that haven't been mentioned? JangFett (Talk) 04:52, February 17, 2010 (UTC)
          • I'm still not seeing how the misinterpretation is happening, if it is that. If you can suggest a specific fix, please do. If not then I'll try to catch you on IRC I guess. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 05:07, February 18, 2010 (UTC)
            • Okay, addressed with help from CC. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 07:50, February 21, 2010 (UTC)
    • Other than that, great work, Trayus. JangFett (Talk) 05:31, February 16, 2010 (UTC)
      • Thanks for the review. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 03:57, February 17, 2010 (UTC)
  2. I think a little mention of where the Aparo sector is (Outer Rim Territories) and where it is close to deserve a little mention to allow us to get the full context of the sector strategic importance. Also, a mention on the sector placements of the planets of Belkadan, Sernipidal, and Rurria would be worth mentioning too. They can be sourced to The Essential Atlas Online Companion. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 12:13, February 16, 2010 (UTC)
    • Take a look and let me know if this is what you were looking for. And thanks for the review. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 03:57, February 17, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

  • Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 14:24, February 23, 2010 (UTC)