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Assassination attempt on Patriarch Thooraki

  • Nominated by: BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 18:25, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Thrass' dad is the bar. every person shouod aspire to reach that bar
  • Date Archived: 21:12, 17 February 2023 (UTC)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:Chiss WP:Novels

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Support

  1. ACvote Nicely done. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 18:12, 15 January 2023 (UTC)
  2. ACvote —spookywillowwtalk 14:37, 26 January 2023 (UTC)
  3. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 15:31, 26 January 2023 (UTC)
  4. ACvote LucaRoR Sigil of House Serenno (Talk) 14:59, 17 February 2023 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 21:10, 17 February 2023 (UTC)

Object

Samonic
  • Nice work! Just a few things:
    • You should probably establish that the Mitth family was a part of the Chiss Ascendancy in the intro.
    • The article currently says that Thrass's father intervened because he saw Thooraki "in desperate need" every time the intervention is mentioned. Could you introduce some variation?
    • I'd recommend changing the caption of Thrass's picture to something with a bigger connection to the assassination attempt. e.g. "The father of Syndic Thrass (pictured) saved Patriarch Thooraki."
    • I don't think Lesser Evil mentions an assassin. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 19:36, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
  • You can specify that Thrass recounted the attempt to Thrawn by 19 BBY. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 12:02, 17 January 2023 (UTC)
Macaroni
  • Can you explain how Thrass and Thrawn are brothers if Thrawn is unfamiliar with his dad? They seem to be friends who declared themselves brothers per Mitth'ras'safis's article, but it's a little confusing here. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 05:57, 15 January 2023 (UTC)
    • reworded "brother" -> "friend" because tbh i have no clue how to describe their relationship as brothers if they dont have the same parents BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 16:40, 15 January 2023 (UTC)
Braha
  • "As the woman's son, Mitth'ras'safis, "Thrass," was born just a week after his father's death, before his mother joined the Mitth, he would have become a ranking distant." This sentence covers two matters without any good flow between them (specifically the way the final clause is kinda just an add on for the former three clauses). I would like to suggest bisecting this. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 23:11, 13 February 2023 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 21:10, 17 February 2023 (UTC)


  • Review notes:
    • Patriarch is always capitalized.
    • You should use … instead of "..." in quotes.
    • Remember that you should insert […] when you skip dialogue in a quote. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 19:00, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
      • noted, much thanks BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 19:07, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
        • Heads up that this was not an instance where quotes were necessary since there weren't any interrupted sentences. See Oseon 2795 as an example of where that would be the case. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 05:57, 15 January 2023 (UTC)
          • Understood, thank you. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 09:28, 15 January 2023 (UTC)
  • I've taken over all of Ziara's nominations since he left the site. Samonic Signatureicon (he/him) 09:58, 5 February 2023 (UTC)