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Ambush on Tatooine (Darth Maul)

  • Nominated by: LelalMekha 12:14, June 19, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:This one hasn't been review by anyone, so I guess there will be many objections, but... that's how it works.

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Looked for more objections when I was free, couldn't find any. Good Work! 501st dogma(talk) 18:45, June 19, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Darth Maul running away… Hope TCW never gets wind of this story, they might decide to make Maul like they made Grievous.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:53, June 20, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Plagueis327 (talk) 02:03, June 30, 2012 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:04, July 26, 2012 (UTC)
  5. Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 13:40, July 26, 2012 (UTC)
  6. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 21:47, July 29, 2012 (UTC)
  7. ACvote—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 20:00, August 7, 2012 (UTC)

Object

501st
  • As this the title is conjecture, you should not start the article out as it is currently. Instead, something like this (but better); "During the Naboo Crisis in 32 BBY, Darth Maul was ambushed by the Sand People." You will have to reword some of the first bit to make this possible.
    • Reworded. Not sure if it fits you're requirements, so feel free to comment further!--LelalMekha 16:59, June 19, 2012 (UTC)
  • Context for Coruscant in Prelude.
  • In the Prelude you say the ship was headed for Tatooine. It should be changed to say on the planet Tatooin, as that was from where the trace was sent.
  • Context for Mos Espa maybe.
  • That's it for now as I am pressed for time. Good work. 501st dogma(talk) 16:28, June 19, 2012 (UTC)
Objections, objections…
  • In the Prelude, you need to give the proper source for Maul's status as a Dathomirian, something from TCW or the new book by Windham. I'm looking at this line specifically: …a Dathomirian Zabrak known as Darth Maul…—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 06:28, June 20, 2012 (UTC)
    • Fixed. --LelalMekha 07:02, June 20, 2012 (UTC)
      • Could you fix the reference by the word "Zabrak?"—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:38, June 20, 2012 (UTC)
        • Oh, dear! Hadn't seen this. Fixed. --LelalMekha 19:42, June 20, 2012 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • Didn't the Trade Federation occupy the entire planet of Naboo or at least most of it? The way you word the article, it sounds like the Trade Federation just invaded Theed.
    • It seems that only Theed and its vicinity were occupied, if I understand correctly the "Invasion of Naboo" article. --LelalMekha (talk) 18:32, July 22, 2012 (UTC)
  • Why would the treaty need to be forged if they forced the queen to sign it?
  • In the result section of the infobox I believe you should mention Darth Maul's retreat.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 00:33, July 15, 2012 (UTC)
Cav
  • Firstly, the date. You ref the date in the infobox to Star Wars Episode I Journal: Darth Maul and Star Wars: The Wrath of Darth Maul. However, in the bio, you ref the year to the NEC. So, which is correct? I'm guessing the NEC date since I don't believe either of the other two books would mention 32 BBY directly.
    • You are correct, NEC definitely is the source. The dating in the infobox is obviously a mistake dating back to the early stages of my writing. Done. --LelalMekha (talk) 18:32, July 22, 2012 (UTC)
  • Regarding the infobox; why is everything double reffed? Only one reference per item is needed, really.
  • Intro: The year of the Naboo Crisis, Darth Maul was ambushed - I would just out and out state the year here.
  • A little context is needed - why were the TF blockading Naboo?
    • I added this sentence: "The invasion was part of a grand plot hatched by Sidious, a part of his scheme to establish himself as Chancellor of the Galactic Republic, beneath his public persona of Senator Palpatine." Is it good enough? --LelalMekha (talk) 18:32, July 22, 2012 (UTC)
  • While he thought that he could have easily defeated five of them with ease - repetition of easily/ease is redundant. Please remove one and/or reword.
  • Context needed - what was the outcome of the duel between Maul and Jinn? - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 18:09, July 22, 2012 (UTC)
    • There it is. Let me know if you think it's sufficient. --LelalMekha (talk) 18:32, July 22, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 20:00, August 7, 2012 (UTC)