- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.
Alderaan Enclave
- Nominated by: Nivlacanator(talk) 05:54, May 7, 2015 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:
First time writing a location. I would like to learn how to do so correctly and well. Let's go! Nivlacanator(talk) 05:54, May 7, 2015 (UTC)
(2 ACs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
Sir Cavalier of One
(Squadron channel) 21:45, June 22, 2015 (UTC)- Winterz (talk) 23:18, June 22, 2015 (UTC)
- Brandon Rhea(talk) 23:19, June 22, 2015 (UTC)
Object
Brandon
The BtS is unsourced.- Oops. Sourced now; although the Story Group one may be kind of flimsy. Nivlacanator(talk) 23:59, May 7, 2015 (UTC)
You need to italicize the issue names in the references. I notice this is a habit that you've gotten into. I would encourage you to break it.- Fixed. I'll watch that for future. Nivlacanator(talk) 23:20, May 7, 2015 (UTC)
It's unclear as to whether or not the Alderaan Enclave will appear in any further issues of the series. I would personally recommend waiting until the series is over until you nominate this, because it risks being an unstable nomination. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 05:58, May 7, 2015 (UTC)- I thought of that too, but ultimately rejected waiting, if based only on the fact that I want to promote more status articles. And would like to learn how to better do so from people like you Mr. Brandon! And I figure if it is in the fourth issue it'll be for just a couple pages at most. Aka, easy to deal with. Sorry for any trouble this could possibly cause in that area. Nivlacanator(talk) 23:20, May 7, 2015 (UTC)
Cav
Opening quote - needs surnames in the quote attribution.- Oops... Nivlacanator(talk) 05:26, June 2, 2015 (UTC)
Intro - you make mention of Organa's team helping the Alderaanians to defeat the Imperial presence, but made no mention of them when introducing Organa earlier in the paragraph. Also, if this team is affiliated with the Rebel Alliance, then that needs to be stated and linked.- Good catch. Linked and noted. Nivlacanator(talk) 00:16, June 3, 2015 (UTC)
Description quote - can you check the formatting? Given its capitalization in the article, I would expect "preserver" to be "Preserver." Also looks like it needs a comma between three and preserver.- Checked, noted and fixed! Nivlacanator(talk) 05:26, June 2, 2015 (UTC)
Context on rockrenders- Yup Nivlacanator(talk) 01:10, June 3, 2015 (UTC)
Context on what a Preserver is- Check Nivlacanator(talk) 01:10, June 3, 2015 (UTC)
Context on the Melodic Order- Pow! Nivlacanator(talk) 01:10, June 3, 2015 (UTC)
Should the Lord Junn, as a starship, be italicized?- Sir Cavalier of One
(Squadron channel) 16:19, May 31, 2015 (UTC)
- Check~ Nivlacanator(talk) 00:16, June 3, 2015 (UTC)
Grunny
First paragraph of the Description: The first reference is to Ultimate Star Wars confirming the architectural style, but all the information preceding it can't be referenced to Ultimate Star Wars. So there needs to be a reference to the comic in the appropriate place so it is clear which information comes from Ultimate Star Wars.- Good catch! Nivlacanator(talk)
"During the Galactic Civil War, their homeworld of Alderaan was destroyed by the Empire to test their ultimate weapon" – This is the beginning of a new paragraph, so clarify the first "their" is the Alderaanian inhabitants.grunny@wookieepedia:~$ 16:48, June 30, 2015 (UTC)- Again, nice catch! Nivlacanator(talk) 04:24, July 1, 2015 (UTC)
- Good job. :) But as 501st dogma has pointed out below, this now exceeds 1,000 words (1,142 by my count), so should be taken to the FAN. grunny@wookieepedia:~$ 08:01, July 1, 2015 (UTC)
- Yeah, about that... I tried doing that once before and everything exploded. Cade bailed me out, but I really need some help with that. :) Nivlacanator(talk) 05:58, July 3, 2015 (UTC)
Ayrehead
- I feel that both Bornae and Mr. Covis should be mentioned somewhere since both are residents of the enclave and Covis seems to hold a relatively important role. Ayrehead02 (talk) 13:52, July 1, 2015 (UTC)
- Hmmm... I'll see what I can do... Nivlacanator(talk) 05:58, July 3, 2015 (UTC)
- Added Nivlacanator(talk) 06:42, July 4, 2015 (UTC)