Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Adana

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Adana

• Nominated by: OLIOSTER ^(talk) 05:04, January 17, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: More from the refugee sector.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 18:16, January 19, 2011 (UTC)
2. Menkooroo 03:02, February 7, 2011 (UTC)
3. I'm creeped out by the fact that she looks like something from Children of the Corn. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:51, February 8, 2011 (UTC)
4. 1358 ^(Talk) 20:32, February 11, 2011 (UTC)
5. Clean. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 19:27, February 12, 2011 (UTC)
6. CC7567 ^(talk) 02:29, February 13, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Graestan

• You're not really doing Nar Shaddaa justice in its first mention. Please give more context. Graestan^(Talk) 05:17, January 17, 2011 (UTC)
  • Better? OLIOSTER ^(talk) 05:35, January 17, 2011 (UTC)
    • I would avoid the term "ecumenopolis" because it is not directly source-able for Nar Shaddaa. Graestan^(Talk) 06:25, January 17, 2011 (UTC)
      • How about now? OLIOSTER ^(talk) 07:15, January 17, 2011 (UTC)
        • You really should explain briefly in the intro, and a bit more in the bio, what is going on in the galaxy that there are refugees on Nar Shaddaa to begin with. Graestan^(Talk) 02:11, January 21, 2011 (UTC)
          • I believe this has been addressed. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 19:04, January 31, 2011 (UTC)
• Dark Wars needs context. In my opinion, since it's such a vague topic and I don't remember any mention in the game, I'd drop the "Dark Wars" terminology completely. Fixing the objection before this one would cover the context the Dark Wars would need anyhow. Graestan^(Talk) 02:33, January 21, 2011 (UTC)
  • Hopefully addressed. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 05:50, January 21, 2011 (UTC)

Trayus

• You should probably mention in the P&T that she was resentful towards Saquesh and wanted to see him "thrashed" or somesuch as evidenced in that bio quote. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 06:13, January 17, 2011 (UTC)
  • Addressed. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 06:47, January 17, 2011 (UTC)
    • Ehhh I feel like that's a bit awkwardly phrased for an encyclopedia entry. Can you paraphrase her to get rid of those quotes and change that "had no love for" to something else? Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 10:32, January 18, 2011 (UTC)
      • Better? OLIOSTER ^(talk) 18:19, January 18, 2011 (UTC)
        • Much. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 07:18, February 3, 2011 (UTC)

Lee attacks

• the former Jedi Knight, the Jedi Exile. I'm sure the Jedi Exile was not the only former Jedi Knight.
  • Addressed. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 20:25, January 18, 2011 (UTC)
• Intro is a bit too long.
  • Removed a little bit. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 20:25, January 18, 2011 (UTC)
• Bio: Mention that she is a Human female.
  • Addressed. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 20:25, January 18, 2011 (UTC)
• Otherwise nice. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 18:49, January 18, 2011 (UTC)

!!

• At the end of the intro, "Adana's mother, Nadaa, was ecstatic..." reads kinda oddly --- it's already been established a few times that Nadaa is her mother; is it necessary to point it out again?
• Can you reword "planet-wide city" in the bio? Nar Shaddaa isn't a planet.
• Ch-ch-check out my edit, specifically the punctuation I removed from the ends of the quote attributions. This article is good eatin'! Menkooroo 11:29, January 25, 2011 (UTC)
  • A-a-a-ddressed. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 19:02, January 31, 2011 (UTC)

43110

• Quote, not dialogue. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 17:18, January 29, 2011 (UTC)
  • Addressed. OLIOSTER ^(talk) 19:09, January 31, 2011 (UTC)
  • Objection(s) overridden by AgriCorps 02:29, February 13, 2011 (UTC)

1358

• Nar Shaddaa's context in the intro is just too much. Please remove some.
• "While visiting the refugee sector…" Why isn't refugee sector capitalized, like earlier?
• "The Exile was unsuccessful and was forced to slay the Quarren and his guards. The Exile then freed Adana from her prison. Adana was overjoyed to be free and returned to her mother." Choppy; please merge or something.
  • Good? OLIOSTER ^(talk) 06:19, February 3, 2011 (UTC)
• More to come, possibly. 1358 ^(Talk) 20:20, February 2, 2011 (UTC)
• "…a moon of the planet Nal Hutta covered entirely by a single city." Since I'm not familiar with the source material, I'll leave it to you to link the city there. :P 1358 ^(Talk) 19:59, February 11, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nevermind; consulting with a few other people we came to the conclusion no article exists/is needed. Good job on the article. :) 1358 ^(Talk) 20:32, February 11, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:29, February 13, 2011 (UTC)

• Alot of it was copied over from Nadaa but I tried to change it enough to seem different. :P OLIOSTER ^(talk) 05:04, January 17, 2011 (UTC)