Wookieepedia:Featured article reviews/Ton Phanan

Requested By: — spookywilloww talk
Date Requested: 02:30, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
Date Archived: 23:56, 20 August 2024 (UTC)

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Ton Phanan

Would like to see some BBY dates tucked in the intro.
Seems like a slight bit of underlinking and undercontexting (see first sentence, not mentioned to be a planet); this is present throughout, not just the one example.
Article to be stubbed and worked in for his parents.
Some of the date references should be properly expanded on rather than direct to TERC.
There's some double-referencing used that should be referenced instead to individual sentence portions.
Some subject-linked imagery can populate throughout.
Every biography subsection except for the first one should have its paragraphs split up a bit for the modern skin; this will likely result in most of those becoming two sections instead of one, and quotes to match.
PT section can also use the same love with splitting paragraphs.
Skills section to be added.
If X-Wing: Iron Fist is being mentioned in the BtS it should be contextualized (year, etc, and such).
Pronouns/family update.—spookywilloww^talk 02:30, 20 June 2024 (UTC)

Marked as on probation at 1 month unaddressed. Lewisr (talk) 00:02, 20 July 2024 (UTC)