Overly long paragraphs should be broken up, particularly in the intro and under the Personality and traits and Powers and abilities sections.
Those two sections need to be subsectioned. The information should be structured thematically—for example, details about Zannah's use of her attraction are currently spread and repeated across multiple paragraphs, which really isn't ideal.
Style and grammar make the text quite hard to follow—parantheses should be avoided, and some of the terms are also a bit awkward, like "it might not be cheating" (unclear what "it" refers to), "floated," "coup de graced," "nearly-dead body" etc. We should also try and use more organic language like "woman" instead of "female" in prose.
More images are needed OOM224 17:42, 14 December 2025 (UTC)