- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Zonder
- Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 14:02, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Part of FourDotProject: Evasive Action
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Support
Nice. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:30, 21 December 2008 (UTC)- Sure doesn't look like any Selonian I've ever seen. Chack Jadson (Talk) 03:49, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
- Ekria is next then? Cull Tremayne 06:01, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
--Eyrezer 18:27, 1 February 2009 (UTC)- —Xwing328(Talk) 03:38, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
Object
"Offee, being a healer, was sent to Felucia in the waning stages of the war, and Zonder accompanied her." The connection with Offee being a healer and being sent to Felucia isn't clear here. Might be best to clarify or remove it. "At Employment Center D4176, which was meant for non-Humans only." Not sure if this was meant to be part of the previous sentence or the next, or if it's missing something. Other than that, excellent, and I only just noticed the Jokhalli/divot thing, which is really cool. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 02:05, 17 December 2008 (UTC)- First is tweaked, second has been fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 07:02, 21 December 2008 (UTC)
- From the cockpit of Xwing328:
"Within four days, all water..." How do they know the 'four days part? Is it something as simple as, "Based on their calculations, within four days,...?"- Fixed.
What do you mean by "dispatching the astromech droids?"—Xwing328(Talk) 00:12, 26 January 2009 (UTC)- Changed to "Destroying" Thefourdotelipsis 23:54, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 18:30, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
- Maybe there should be something in there about how his active life was untypical for Selonian males? Yrfeloran 22:32, 7 December 2008 (UTC)