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Zeison Sha
(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 total)
Support
Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 16:01, 1 December 2007 (UTC)
- Gets my vote.Master Aban Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 19:00, 1 December 2007 (UTC)
Thefourdotelipsis 01:01, 2 December 2007 (UTC)
That thing looks like it would hurt.—Graestan(This party's over) 04:50, 2 December 2007 (UTC)
Greyman(Paratus) 14:09, 3 December 2007 (UTC)
-- Darth Culator (Talk) 02:01, 7 December 2007 (UTC)
Oppose
- From the fjord of Imperialles:
The infobox needs to be sourced.- Sourced. Master Aban Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 19:00, 1 December 2007 (UTC)
The "History" section contains several one- or two-sentence paragraphs. Either merge these with existing paragraphs, or expand them enough to warrant separate paragraphs. This is an article, not a chronological list of facts.The above phenomenon appears in the "Philosophy" and "Common abilities" sections as well.
- --Imperialles 16:39, 1 December 2007 (UTC)
- Addressed, as much as possible. Atarumaster88
(Talk page) 19:14, 1 December 2007 (UTC)
- From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
Link more thoroughly, please. Once per article or once in intro/once in main body, and I noticed a few missing links.- Relinked. Master Aban Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 19:00, 1 December 2007 (UTC)
The last sentence of "History" is somewhat ponderous.- Addressed. Atarumaster88
(Talk page) 19:14, 1 December 2007 (UTC)
- Addressed. Atarumaster88
"Their use of the Force was built around its use for defense" is a bit awkward.- Fixed. Master Aban Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 19:00, 1 December 2007 (UTC)
- —Graestan(This party's over) 16:46, 1 December 2007 (UTC)
Comments
Approved by Inquisitorius 22:44, 8 December 2007 (UTC)
- This is over 1,100 words for those wondering. Atarumaster88
(Talk page) 16:01, 1 December 2007 (UTC)