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Ysanne Isard (clone)

  • Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 17:48, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I wonder how she would have been called if Tim Zahn had written the book. Yyysanne, Ysanneee, Yssssaaannne?

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. StarNeptuneTalk to me! 18:37, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Thefourdotelipsis 10:02, May 29, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 15:15, June 20, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 11:52, July 1, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Grunny (talk) 01:40, July 5, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Please watch the use of would/could as they are not pure past tense conjugations. Context needs to be very specific and handled carefully They are naturally present tense conditional moods that are used colloquially in the past tense but do not function that way in writing. — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:51, July 5, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote my last objection now taken care of. --Eyrezer 04:18, July 5, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Comet Express

I'd just like to state for the record that I've never read the X-wing novels, and my knowledge of Isard comes almost exclusively from the New Essential Guide to Characters and the New Essential Chronology. That being said, here is my review.

  • It is unclear to me why Isard wanted to kill her clone after the mission to Thyferra was over, especially after all the work she seemed to put into growing it. I assume it was due to her "ice heart" nature, but maybe there was some sort of thinking behind it?
    • Addressed.
  • "While the prisoners were being kept at the Commenor facility, the clone paid for their housing to Xenovet's trustee, the attorney Mem Wooter, from her financial institutions also in the Corvis Minor system." At this point, the clone has head trauma and believes she is the real Isard. Do these accounts belong to the real Isard and the clone stole from them, or did the clone set them up independently?
    • The book's kinda vague on this subject. The only mention of the accounts comes from Mirax Terrik and Iella Wessiri, who, unaware the clone's existence, find out that "Isard made payments for housing the prisoners through financial institutions located in the Corvis Minor system." However, as it is revealed that the Isard who kept the prisoners was in fact the clone and not the real one, the conclusion is that it was the clone who made those payments, but whether she set the accounts herself or used preexisting ones is unknown.
  • In the meantime, the clone released a series of files that supposedly showed that Krennel did not have the resources in the Hegemony to build such a project. One of them, however, the Corvis Minor file, had been tampered with to show the exact opposite Who tampered with the Corvis Minor file? The clone?
    • Yep.
  • When Krennel and Isard did not receive word from the ambushing force, the Prince-Admiral instructed the Star Destroyer Aspiration stationed in the system to check the site of the battle. I think you mean the clone here, not Isard herself.
    • Addressed.
  • The clone realized that the Star Destroyer was the property of the criminal Booster Terrik How did she discover this?
    • Addressed.
  • [Isard, however, decided to find Lorrir herself and located him in the operations room inside the hangar—"Roat," who was in fact the leader of Rogue Squadron, Wedge Antilles, had stunned Lorrir with a blaster and locked him there.] [After the failed attack, Antilles revealed to Isard that she was in fact a mere clone.] [Playing dead, Isard put static through the comm system.] Again, I assume you were referring to the clone in these sentences.
    • Yes, I was. All fixed.
  • Other than the above, it was a good read overall. :) StarNeptuneTalk to me! 23:39, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
Chack Jadson

Quote, not dialogue, for the main quote. Chack Jadson (Talk) 14:06, May 18, 2010 (UTC)

  • Addressed. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 14:25, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
    • The quote-not-dialogue thing is actually only for two-person, two-line quotes. I think dialogue would be a lot easier to read in this case. - Lord Hydronium 05:45, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
      • Personally, I don't mind either wording. I'm going to leave it as a quote for now. However, if people prefer the dialogue, I'll change it back. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 10:14, May 29, 2010 (UTC)
Xicer
  • Intro: "By planting a series of clues to the supposed location of the prisoners, she lured the squadron to the moon of Distna" This makes it sound like Distna is a planet that has its own moon. Please rephrase. The same thing goes for a similar sentence in the second paragraph of "Allying with Krennel."
    • Addressed.
  • I'm assuming the quote in "Schemes and machinations" is directed toward the clone. If so, the attribution should reflect that, as the quote itself doesn't make it completely clear.
    • Addressed.
  • Schemes and machinations: you seem to use "Isard" to refer to the clone several times. This is rather confusing since you use "Isard" to refer to the real Isard in every other case.
    • Addressed.
  • P&T: You mention that her face was surgically repaired, but the only other reference to her scarring is in the bio. I would suggest throwing a brief mention in the P&T as well, maybe in relation her surgery.
    • Addressed.
  • That's it. Great work, it'll be nice to see all three Isards with the star. Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 21:58, June 6, 2010 (UTC)
Eyrezer
  • Intro: "however, before she could do so, Isard was overthrown, and the clone was subsequently left alone in the galaxy." Did the real Isard escape capture here despite begin overthrown? Can you add something here to explain what happened to the original? --Eyrezer 23:47, June 19, 2010 (UTC)
  • "Krennel debunked his charges in killing Pestage via the HoloNet, stating that he had only done what the New Republic had wanted to do all along." Is this charges against him? I am not quite sure what you are saying here.
    • Addressed.
      • "by killing Pestage he had only done what the New Republic had wanted to do all along." Can you also expand on what this means? Is it that the NR wanted a human leader killed? Although I am aware this could stray from the main subject of the article. --Eyrezer 00:41, June 30, 2010 (UTC)
        • Addressed. Basically, he just lied in order to appear falsely accused. I'd prefer not to go into too much detail on this. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 16:28, July 1, 2010 (UTC)
  • The Schemes section is pretty huge. Can you divide it up into some smaller sections? --Eyrezer 05:25, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
    • Chopped it in half.
  • Was it actually Booster's Star Destroyer that picked up the Rogues? If so, could you change it to "the clone correctly realized that the Star Destroyer was the property of Terrik"? At the moment, it is all from the perspective of what the clone thinks and suspects, so difficult to tell what actually happened. The small change I suggest above should clarify it. --Eyrezer 02:33, June 29, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 04:18, July 5, 2010 (UTC)