- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Xenon Nnaksta
- Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:57, 29 September 2008 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Part 1 of 22 of AckyProject GOSS.
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Support
Graestan(Talk) 21:54, 30 September 2008 (UTC)- I am a wreckless driver. Chack Jadson (Talk) 20:56, 1 October 2008 (UTC)
- Atarumaster88
(Talk page) 19:24, 8 October 2008 (UTC) - Part 1, eh? You gotta love WEG :) Greyman(Talk) 13:20, 11 October 2008 (UTC)
- -- Darth Culator (Talk) 23:53, 11 October 2008 (UTC)
Oppose
- From the Survival School of Chack Jadson:
"urban uprising was saw" Is this supposed to be "which saw"? Otherwise, great work.Chack Jadson (Talk) 15:17, 30 September 2008 (UTC)- Yep. Fixed. Thank you very much. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:38, 30 September 2008 (UTC)
- From the desk of Atarumaster88
"Extremely successful class" is POV (intro).- Altered
A bit more context on Maw'shiye or whatever his name is would be good (intro), in terms of occupation- Done.
"made him extremely tough" Some POV here. I generally call POV whenever extremes are stated, because what's extreme is a relative decision. It's not the best descriptive word also.- Altered.
"Nnaskta thrived along with his class, which was made of a dozen individuals of varied species and temperaments who complemented each other's skills perfectly, and worked exceptionally as a unit" POV- Altered.
"assignment's previous records and becoming a force to be reckoned with, either collectively or as individuals." POV, and what does "assignment's previous records" mean?- Altered and clarified.
"Their first hurdle was relatively simple" Again, POV.- Satisfactory?
He seems to be a rather skilled person. Is there enough information to merit a T&A? I'll leave that to your judgment, but some more detail on exactly how skilled he is would be nice; as a sourcebook/AJ character, he's hopefully got some good stuff.Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 18:06, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
- I'll look into it. Thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:56, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:58, 12 October 2008 (UTC)