Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Vua Rapuung

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Vua Rapuung

(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total)

Support

  1. Whoops. I nominated another character. Harrar 19:31, 13 January 2008 (UTC)
  2. Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 23:27, 16 January 2008 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 08:43, 21 January 2008 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 02:19, 27 January 2008 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote More Jeedai heresy articles a must. Graestan(Talk) 03:17, 29 January 2008 (UTC)
  6. Your Jeedai are no match for my Seeth! Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:50, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Nicely written, Harrar. Greyman(Paratus) 14:40, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
  8. Inqvote Imperialles 19:33, 6 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

  1. From the Forest of Goodwood:
    • I hate to say it bud because I really like what you've done for it, but that intro should be tightened up a bit. Try removing some of the specifics and instead focusing on the broader picture of the character's life and dealings.
      • Yeah, I didn't think it would really work with a more important Yuuzhan Vong to be honest. It has been reshaped.
    • "as it was the famed warrior soon rose to the rank of commander" reads a little awkwardly. Perhaps break this clause off from the rest of the sentence and expand it a tad?
      • Addressed and rearranged.
    • The Consequences of love section could be broken up into at least two paragraphs for ease of reading.
      • Cut it up a good place. See what you think.
    • The first paragraph in the Return section could also be broken in half.
      • It is now broken.
    • "As the warriors at the base of the ramp closed in, Hul Rapuung called out to Solo, proclaiming that he would attain honor by killing the Jedi." -- Is that supposed to be Solo or Rapuung? It's been a long time since I read that book so your pardon if I'm wrong.
      • Re-read it—it's great! Hul does shout out to Anakin, telling him that it will be an honor to defeat the youngster in a duel. Vua is on the floor dying at this point, but he gets back up and defends Anakin.
    • TIMMMMBERRRRR!!!--Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 00:37, 16 January 2008 (UTC)
      • Thanks for looking through another one Goodwood! Harrar 20:16, 16 January 2008 (UTC)
        • You're welcome, bud. Keep it up, you've got some talent there; experience will hone that talent.--Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 23:26, 16 January 2008 (UTC)
  2. From the desk of Atarumaster88
    • "On Yavin 4, where the headquarters of the New Jedi Order had been overrun by the Yuuzhan Vong in 26 ABY, Rapuung worked as a Shamed One, with Mezhan Kwaad, who he occasionally, rarely remembered with something less than hatred, only a short distance away in one of the damuteks planted on the world." Bit of a run-on here.
      • That was pretty unwieldy! I rearranged it.
    • A bit of context on Solo's broken lightsaber would be good. (How it was broken.)
      • In the Aiding Solo section (end of 1st paragraph) I included a little mdash bit which explains it.
    • Other than, this is another example of the good, well-planned, well-written noms we've come to expect and relish from you. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 16:10, 20 January 2008 (UTC)
      • Thanks! Sadly I'm gonna take a Wookieevacation&mdas;I'm addicted—until I've done my summer exams (long term revision etc), but after that I'll have five months of nothingness and can work my way through the NJO articles! Harrar 21:40, 20 January 2008 (UTC)
        • We'll miss seeing your noms, but good luck with your RL articles and hopefully we'll see you soon. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 08:43, 21 January 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by Inquisitorius 20:28, 8 February 2008 (UTC)

  • The Kyle Katarn of the Yuuzhan Vong! His page was woefully inadequate when I arrived; I hope it isn't now too bloated—there's a lot to say though. Harrar 19:31, 13 January 2008 (UTC)
  • Btw, I know that the intro is massive; what I did though was write the article then condense its general content and "thesis" into the introduction; thus it's very much a mini, un-ornamented (?) version of the article. I can re-write it if people wish. Harrar 18:30, 14 January 2008 (UTC)
  • For the future, Harrar, avoid putting periods at the end of quote attribution lines. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:28, 21 January 2008 (UTC)