Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Unidentified 501st stormtrooper

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Unidentified 501st stormtrooper

  • Nominated by: Darth Morrt 14:35, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Another minor movie character

(4 Inqs/3 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Good job. Also glad word of Leland finally confirmed the comic's non-canonicity. Hanzo Hasashi 21:26, July 17, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 00:57, July 22, 2011 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Wonderful stuff. Keep these ANH Imperials coming. Menkooroo 03:49, October 2, 2011 (UTC)
  4. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 14:28, October 21, 2011 (UTC)
  5. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 16:51, October 29, 2011 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote --Eyrezer 09:52, December 4, 2011 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Sorry about the delay.—Tommy 9281 Monday, December 5, 2011, 05:30 UTC

Object

Floyd:
  • A little context on why the Devastator captured the Tantive IV should be added to the intro, as that section could use a little beef.
  • Bio: "under the command of an assault commander." Seems a little repetitive.
  • In the bio, particularly the last paragraph, you alternately capitalize and de-capitalize "trooper". Pick one and stay with it.
  • In the bio there's no mention of this trooper actually dying, although it's mentioned in the intro.
  • More to come, possibly. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:23, July 18, 2011 (UTC)
  • BtS: "and did things he was not proud of." Such as? This is very vague.
    • The comic itself isn't exact on this matter. In one panel, it shows burning buildings and a headshotted individual, and on the other, [Redacted by administration] surrounded by stormtroopers. Tha latter could mean many things, some of could not be told directly in a children's comic. I've put in "burning villages and killing innicents". Darth Morrt 14:07, July 21, 2011 (UTC)
  • Context on Leland Chee.
  • "Their days were spent in hunting yaggies for meat and hide, and his father used to talk about every man being equal and free, but he didn't like to hear it." Reword this: it sounds like his father didn't like to hear it.
  • "by ordering a stormtrooper to shoot the man dead." Did the stormtrooper's father get killed or not? This would need to be reworded to explicitly say so.
  • There are several short, choppy paragraphs in the BtS that should be merged together.
  • Same inconsistent capitalization of "trooper" in the BtS.
  • "ignited it to force the defender to flinch" What defender? Do you mean the Rebels on the ship?
  • That's all. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:26, July 21, 2011 (UTC)
Watch you walk away
  • It looks like there's room for another image from Trooper at the end of "Behind the Scenes." How about it?
    • Added his headshot. Darth Morrt 11:49, September 21, 2011 (UTC)
      • Good stuff. Per the Image policy, that text bubble shouldn't be blanked out, though. Since you're going to have to upload a new image anyway --- are there any in the comic of him unmasked? Since that's unique to Trooper, it might make a nice addition to the article. Your call. Menkooroo 05:40, September 22, 2011 (UTC)
        • He is shown unmasked only from back or unidentifiably in a crowd. I've reuploaded his headshot image. Darth Morrt 10:43, October 1, 2011 (UTC)
  • 4rd Trooper. --- Is that a mistake? Should it be 3rd, or maybe 4th?
    • He is the 4th. Darth Morrt 11:49, September 21, 2011 (UTC)
  • I feel like the bit in Trooper where the trooper's last thoughts are "But I won't." should be added to the end of "Behind the Scenes."
  • Just a note that I changed the facebook link to point to the specific post. If, on someone's facebook wall, you click on the date and time of a post, it will take you to a URL of that specific post.
  • "He participated, among other things, in climbing, swamp, melee combat, and shooting exercises..." Should something be after "swamp?" I'm not sure how he could participate in swamp. :P Menkooroo 06:39, September 21, 2011 (UTC)
QGJ
  • The fact that he considered Organa the most beautiful girl he had ever seen should be mentioned in the text. If this were canon, it would have been legitimate P&T information. Here, it should be fine with the rest of "Trooper" info. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 13:00, October 20, 2011 (UTC)
Omi
  • "The Human insulted the troopers and his speak reminded the Trooper of his father, so he shot him dead and instructed the others to find another prisoner instead." Should that be changed to speech or words or tone? I haven't read the story in a long time so I am not sure exactly what happens in the scene, but it needs to be changed to be more grammatically correct. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 16:33, October 20, 2011 (UTC)
Tommy
  • The "Trooper" section of the BtS needs to be written more from an OOU perspective. As it currently is, it reads as though it is a second biography.—Tommy 9281 Sunday, October 30, 2011, 19:04 UTC
    • Reworded. Currently, it speaks the events in biographical order. Should I change it into the order presented in the comic, mentioning the flashback where they are in the comic? Darth Morrt 17:40, November 1, 2011 (UTC)
      • Yes, if you are going to compare those instances to what is deemed canon. Also, the edit you did is littered with errors. Please go through and tidy it up.—Tommy 9281 Tuesday, November 1, 2011, 22:07 UTC
        • Last week I made grammar corrections in Morrt's absence, and Morrt seemed to have made it OOU enough. Hanzo Hasashi 02:49, December 2, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 05:30, December 5, 2011 (UTC)

  • I've placed any info from Trooper (comic) into the BTS, since the comic contradicts Battlefront II and a TCG card. Darth Morrt 14:35, July 14, 2011 (UTC)
  • I've corrected alot of grammar, but it is understandable since English is not your first language. I find myself just that kind of guy who will make grammar corrections on various articles. Also, not sure if "Trooper" and "Recruit" need to be capitalized, but I felt not. Feel free to change back if you feel otherwise. Hanzo Hasashi 21:26, July 17, 2011 (UTC)
    • Thank you for the grammar corrections. I think that a rank should be capitalized when it refers to a person, but I am not sure wheather trooper and recruit are counted as ranks. I leave it decapitalized until someone objects it. Darth Morrt 00:08, July 18, 2011 (UTC)
  • On the link that Hanzo posted on your talk page, it's revealed that the only stormtrooper voice actors in A New Hope were Terry McGovern, Jerry Walters, Scott Beach, and Morgan Upton. You could add that information to this article's "Behind the scenes," as we can definitively say that one of those four guys voiced this stormtrooper. Actually, you could narrow it down evern further --- it's not Terry McGovern, as he doesn't include "There's one. Set for stun." in the list of lines he provided. I guess you'll have some redlinks to fill in, too. Menkooroo 06:46, October 20, 2011 (UTC)
  • I won't have time to complete this nomination, so I request to archive it as a failed one. Darth Morrt 15:41, November 20, 2011 (UTC)
  • Is it possible for someone to assume responsibility?—Tommy 9281 Sunday, November 20, 2011, 15:44 UTC
    • I will do grammar corrections, as I feel that is a sofixit. Hanzo Hasashi 21:35, November 21, 2011 (UTC)
      • Done. If any more objections, I might be able to fix them as long as they are not large scale. I will message Darth Morrt. Hanzo Hasashi 21:42, November 21, 2011 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)

  1. Inqvote Idle objection(s) now one month old. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:20, December 1, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote 1358 (Talk) 21:46, December 1, 2011 (UTC)