Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Unda Lagor

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Unda Lagor

• Nominated by: Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 12:10, January 20, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: DarkStryder? Yes! Mind-polluting artifacts? No! A character keeping alive a species-based stereotype? Absolutely!

(4 Inqs/3 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. More DarkStryder! We need more DarkStryder!!—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 16:16, January 23, 2012 (UTC)
2. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 02:41, January 25, 2012 (UTC)
3. Menkooroo 17:27, February 21, 2012 (UTC)
4. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:02, February 24, 2012 (UTC)
5. Love his quote. ~Savage 00:00, February 26, 2012 (UTC)
6. Plagueis327 17:28, March 6, 2012 (UTC)
7. Everybody can have a bad day… 1358 ^(Talk) 23:10, March 10, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Return of the Jedi

• In the intro, you say he "enjoyed" violence. In the P&T, you say that he had no "qualms" about it, making it sounds like he didn't necessarily enjoy it. Which is it?
  • Should be enjoyed. Changed the PT to reflect this.
• Should not the Imperial that he got his armor from get an article, or at least a redlink?
  • Redlink created, should be filled in shortly.
• Very nice article.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 16:25, January 20, 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 09:21, January 23, 2012 (UTC)

Just two

• In the P&T, "As evidenced by his..." reads more like an OOU statement than an IU one, ie something for a ref note or the BTS. Do you think you can reword? As an IU statement, it kind of sounds like the article's trying to convince the reader of something.
  • Okay, try that.
• "A member of the support crew of the FarStar, the gamemaster and players are..." reads as if the gamemaster and players are members of the support crew. This sentence also goes on to alternate between past and present tense. Can you fix it up? Menkooroo 12:59, February 20, 2012 (UTC)
  • Think I've clarified it a little better. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 12:06, February 21, 2012 (UTC)

Savaged…

• Didn't Schweighofer design all the characters for DarkStryder? That would be worth mentioning in BTS.
  • Added.
• Similarly, Vilardi, Vilardi, Vilardi! :) (I suppose the artist IDs are optional, but I think for characters with only one depiction, it's good info to include.) ~Savage 14:43, February 25, 2012 (UTC)
  • Also added. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 22:56, February 25, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 23:10, March 10, 2012 (UTC)