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Triffian
- Nominated by: ~Savage
16:02, December 4, 2011 (UTC) - Nomination comments: Another Phantom Menace nom for the Barn Burner. If you feel like reviewing one of my species noms, please focus on this one or Troig rather than one of the non-TPM ones, at least until the BB is over! :) ~Savage 16:02, December 4, 2011 (UTC)
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Support
IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:16, December 5, 2011 (UTC)
--Eyrezer 11:37, December 7, 2011 (UTC)- Menkooroo 21:50, December 10, 2011 (UTC)
- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 10:47, December 15, 2011 (UTC)
- CC7567 (talk) 19:40, December 24, 2011 (UTC)
Object
Cav
A little context on who Gorto Zaga is and why the town was walled off is needed I think.- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 12:30, December 7, 2011 (UTC)
- OK, take a look. It's not very clear from the comic what Zaga's motives are, but the CSWE implies it was to protect his illegal blaster running. ~Savage 13:08, December 7, 2011 (UTC)
- OK, take a look. It's not very clear from the comic what Zaga's motives are, but the CSWE implies it was to protect his illegal blaster running. ~Savage
More questions than objections, really
Do any of the canon illustrations feature teeth? If not, is it worth noting in the BTS that there were teeth in the concept art but that canon is unclear on the matter?- Bio & Appearance details how the hair grows on the eyes and nose before it actually establishes that the species has eyes and a nose. The first time eyes and a nose are mentioned it's kind of like "They have those?" with the confirmation sentence coming later on. Could this be switched around?
- Should it be outright stated that there's a mouth on their snout, or does simply mentioning a snout cover the existence of a mouth too?
- In Eelen Li's homeworld, it states "The people of her homeworld were Triffians, like Li." If Triffians live on this planet, could it get a mention at the end of "Society and culture" (and maybe a mention that they appeared in a stone carving)?
- Would a note that some females found Endocott handsome be at home in Bio & Appearance?
- Would either of the quotes in Ebe E. Endocott fit anywhere in the article?
It's nitpicky, and it's all I've got.Fantastic work! Menkooroo 09:12, December 9, 2011 (UTC)- Nice nitpicks! I've tried to address everything but a couple points. First, I checked the dictionary just to be sure, but the definition of "snout" is pretty much a nose/mouth combo that sticks out; as such, I think explicitly mentioning a mouth isn't necessary. As for mentioning Eelen Li's homeworld in the S&C part, I've instead tried to retool the first paragraph of history to more prominently play up the ancient history on that planet. What do you think? It's a bit frustrating to be dancing around the fact that they are from Triffis, but the PTB don't seem to care about our plight. :P Thanks for the review, and let me know if there's anything else. ~Savage 15:40, December 10, 2011 (UTC)
- Excellent job mentioning Eelen Li's homeworld and Triffis separately but leaving open the possibility that they're one and the same. The whole article is an excellent job; sorry for the nitpicks! :P Menkooroo 21:50, December 10, 2011 (UTC)
- Nice nitpicks! I've tried to address everything but a couple points. First, I checked the dictionary just to be sure, but the definition of "snout" is pretty much a nose/mouth combo that sticks out; as such, I think explicitly mentioning a mouth isn't necessary. As for mentioning Eelen Li's homeworld in the S&C part, I've instead tried to retool the first paragraph of history to more prominently play up the ancient history on that planet. What do you think? It's a bit frustrating to be dancing around the fact that they are from Triffis, but the PTB don't seem to care about our plight. :P Thanks for the review, and let me know if there's anything else. ~Savage
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 19:40, December 24, 2011 (UTC)