Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Tiplee/Canon

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Tiplee

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 22:29, August 13, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:11, December 11, 2014 (UTC)
  3. JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 07:43, December 19, 2014 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Good article. Not your fault it's set in the sucktastic Abramsverse. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 04:26, January 13, 2015 (UTC)
    • This character's appearances were all written before Abrams (since Son of Dathomir was from episodes written pre-Disney) but I thank you for voting nonetheless. =P - Brandon Rhea(talk) 04:31, January 13, 2015 (UTC)
  5. We need more status Canon articles. You are very adept at this. - AV-6R7User talk:AV-6R7 04:28, January 13, 2015 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:28, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
  7. 501st dogma(talk) 00:47, January 16, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
  • Prelim: Merge "Early life" and "Ringo Vinda". A three sentence paragraph is too small.
  • Plus: You have to mention her eye color in the P&T. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:05, July 20, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done and done. The first one seems unnecessary, but I've nonetheless made the change. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 20:42, July 20, 2014 (UTC)
  • The head quote should use the "quote" and not the "dialogue" format, as there are only two speakers.
  • Intro: Context for Maul, Kenobi and Dooku. Also "death" and the "bio-chip" need to be linked.
    • Did everything other than linking to bio-chip. I don't think that warrants a page. The only canonical bio-chip that I'm aware of is for Clone Protocol 66, and that's covered in the canon Order 66 page that the intro already links to. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 14:38, July 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • Infobox: Is there a link for "color"?
  • I'll continue later. Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:57, July 21, 2014 (UTC)
  • It would be easier to understand the whole stuff about Tup killing her sister if you briefly mentioned what O66 is.
  • In the final paragraph of "Ringo Vinda" you use "killed/killer" quite often. Please try to vary your word choice a little bit here.
  • A little bit more context for Grievous and Dooku (they are CIS key figures) and Maul (rogue Sith Lord) please. Same for Ord Mantell (and earlier Ringo Vinda, but that is nitpicky).
  • P&A: Mention her lightsaber (color) and her ability to use it against Tup. I don't recall much about the comic, but if she shows other force powers/skills with a lightsaber there, please mention them too.
  • BtS: "Portrayed" is a little bit misleading. Could you replace it with "voiced"?
  • BtS: Mention who wrote and drew Tiplar in the comic.
  • Entertaining article, good job. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:22, August 4, 2014 (UTC)
    • Done most of these (need to check back on Son of Dathomir #3 for a few of them before they're all done). That being said, you said "Mention who wrote and drew Tiplar in the comic." Is that necessary? You didn't mention to say who wrote The Unknown, for example. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 16:53, August 6, 2014 (UTC)
      • Everything is done, except for the last objection which the above reply is about. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 05:22, August 9, 2014 (UTC)
        • Well, AFAIK it is common practice to state these info when the article subject appears in a comic. As it is the only source except the episode and it also decipts her death, I find it quite notable. Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:42, August 9, 2014 (UTC)
  • P&A: who killed her in lightsaber and Force combat: Should this be killer her with his lightsaber and force combat? Currently it sounds like he killed the poor gal twice. Clone Commander Lee Talk 10:34, August 9, 2014 (UTC)
Floyd
  • Can we get quotes for the P&T and/or the P&A sections?
    • Added one for P&T that should work well enough, but there's nothing particularly relevant for P&A. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:56, December 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Could we get a link for the clone bio-chip?
  • Context for the Shadow Collective?
  • Any reason why you're calling it "Clone Protocol 66" instead of "Order 66"?
    • That's the phrase that was used throughout the entire arc, until the final line (IIRC) of the last episode of the arc. It's said that Clone Protocol 66 was triggered and nearly discovered by the Jedi. In the end, Sidious says something like "Nothing will stop our plan to execute Order 66." So I used Clone Protocol 66 based on the episode. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:56, December 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Link to the Ringo Vinda space station?
    • I cannot. The Legends page is conjectural. Per policy, a canon page unfortunately cannot be created. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:56, December 10, 2014 (UTC)
  • Double-check your linking, please.
    • Was this in reference to the aforementioned objections, or is there something else you're talking about? Have you spotted something specific? - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:56, December 10, 2014 (UTC)
      • I meant in general. You fixed the couple specific things I was looking at, so we're good there. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 01:11, December 11, 2014 (UTC)
  • Context on Kamino?
  • Context on the Death Watch. IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 02:24, December 10, 2014 (UTC)
Jorrel
  • "She showed anger towards the clone, but Skywalker was able to help her control her emotions and let Tup go." - The "let Tup go" bit is vague. Did you mean that Tiplee released him from her grip, or the clone was allowed to leave the room, or something else? If the former, I'd suggest changing it to "help her control her emotions and convinced her to release Tup."
  • I understand CT-5555 is Fives, because his unit designation is full of fives, but a casual reader might not make the connection. Is there another way to word that to explain the nickname, or drop its usage in the sentence?
  • "Later in the war, Tiplee was sent with fellow Jedi Obi-Wan Kenobi, Mace Windu, and Aayla Secura to investigate the aftermath of a battle on the planet Ord Mantell; the battle was fought between the Shadow Collective, a criminal army led by the rogue Sith Darth Maul, and the Separatists." The usage of the clause after the semicolon feels redundant. Perhaps "Later in the war, Tiplee was sent with fellow Jedi Obi-Wan Kenobi, Mace Windu, and Aayla Secura to investigate the aftermath of a battle, fought between the Shadow Collective, a criminal army led by the rogue Sith Darth Maul, and Separatist forces, on the planet Ord Mantell." That may be personal preference, though.
    • I actually fixed this one in the copyedit I did, but forgot to clean out the objection. Sorry!
  • I think there's a tense issue in "The Jedi deduced that Maul, who captured Separatist leaders Count Dooku and General Grievous on Ord Mantell, may have taken his prisoners to a nearby Mandalorian supply outpost." Specifically, "may have".
  • A good read, though Tiplee seemed to forget that Obi-Wan might have a grievance with Maul for reasons other than those shown in TCW. :P JorrelWiki-shrinkableFraajic 07:23, December 19, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • The Twitter citation should have a screenshot of the post.
    • Good catch. This was written before we started doing that. I've changed the source to something that's not a social media post. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 21:55, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
  • The article's linking was quite lacking. Please pay closer mind to this in future nominations. I've left a number of redlinks, including one in the intro. Please fill enough in to meet FAN requirements. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:48, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
    • This was written when I was only around for 2 months, so I was not as familiar at the time. A nomination sitting for 6 months will do that. =P A lot of those are also ones I'd never think to create as a page due to them being obvious definitions (like twin). That said, thanks for pointing those out. That being said, the Legends Ringo Vinda space station page is a conjectural name. I leave it up to you as to whether that should be a link or not, due to the notability policy. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 21:55, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
      • Slide 13 of "The Unknown" episode gallery calls it the "ring station," which is good enough to keep the article and remove the Conjectural tag. You should move that article and update the links here. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:06, January 15, 2015 (UTC)
        • Thanks. I'll do that. For now, the FAN redlink requirements have been satisfied. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 22:24, January 15, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 01:50, January 16, 2015 (UTC)

This page is only 10-15 words over the minimum word count for a Featured Article. If it drops below 1,000 words as a result of the review, it can be changed to a Good Article nomination. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 06:44, July 17, 2014 (UTC)

  • Tiplee appears in the new comic story "Temple of Phantoms" in Star Wars Comic 9. Do we consider these stories canon or not? I assume not but I thought I'd better bring it to your attention just incase. Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:38, September 3, 2014 (UTC)
    • Looks like we're treating them as canon, maybe? I'll find out more. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 17:04, September 12, 2014 (UTC)
      • Update: there's no indication from that magazine that the story has anything to do with the Story Group, so we won't consider it canon unless Lucasfilm specifies otherwise. - Brandon Rhea(talk) 02:56, December 10, 2014 (UTC)