Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Thought bomb

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Thought bomb

• Nominated by: —Tommy 9281 Saturday, April 9, 2011, 21:43 UTC
• Nomination comments: I trust my outcome will be different from Kaan's...

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. Master Jonathan — ^{Jedi Council Chambers} _{Sunday, April 10, 2011, 01:32 UTC}
2. Jonjedigrandmaster ^(Talk) 15:17, April 10, 2011 (UTC)
3. Well done. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 01:58, April 14, 2011 (UTC)
4. Whoa JangFett ^(Talk) 19:47, April 25, 2011 (UTC)
5. — Fiolli; 19:08, April 29, 2011 (UTC)
6. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:53, May 16, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Toprawa

• According to dictionary.com, "whirlpooled" is not a word. I would perhaps recommend using another description: "As the expanding tide of darkness whirlpooled within the circle"
  • Addressed.
• This is a dangling modifier. It's essentially saying the creators of a thought bomb were an extremely difficult weapon to control. Please revise: "An extremely difficult weapon to control, creators of a thought bomb"
  • Addressed.
• Since the "Seventh Battle of Ruusan" is apparently a conjectural title, this article should avoid referring to it as a formal title. Please revise: "During the Seventh Battle of Ruusan"; and in the BTS: "a Force vision of the Seventh Battle of Ruusan."
  • Addressed.
• Excellent work overall. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:39, May 16, 2011 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review, Toprawa. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy 9281 Monday, May 16, 2011, 00:50 UTC

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:53, May 16, 2011 (UTC)