Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Telos IV

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Telos IV

  • Nominated by: Cylka-talk- 23:31, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My first FA nom. On advice from Graestan...

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Graestan(Talk) 23:34, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
  2. Nice job. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 23:18, 8 January 2009 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 17:25, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote --Eyrezer 22:20, 24 February 2009 (UTC)
  5. DC 23:31, 24 February 2009 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:30, 3 March 2009 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 23:02, 5 March 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. A couple of noodles from the Pasta Bowl:
    • "Telos once possessed an enormous planet-wide polar irrigation system, one that rivaled Coruscant's own." Seems POV-ish. I do not recall anything in TSL that says it rivaled Coruscant.
      • Bao-Dur does comment on it being "like the one on Coruscant". The sentence has been so amended.
        • Fair enough, but "very" was removed, as that is PoV-ish.
    • I believe, although I could be incorrect, but the history section needs {{GameLS}} and {{Endgame}} for the portions pertaining to the Exile's mission on Telos.
      • The template(s) have been added.
    • "The search for the ship led the Exile's group to an old military base…" Is there an article on the military base? I believe a link is needed, but I cannot seem to find the article.
      • There is an article. Link has been inserted.
    • When mentioning the arrival of Carth Onasi, I think it might be beneficial to mention there that he was a Telosian. It serves as a plot point for his motivation in the game.
      • Added.
    • Otherwise, nice article, Cylka. — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 17:22, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
  2. DC
    • BtS needs to be expanded. As of now, the only source you use in it is KOTOR, and you need to talk about the other sources as well.
      • Expanded.
    • You seem to mention Crion and Xanatos a lot in the Bio, so add something about them in intro.
      • Both added.
    • Anything new for Telos in the CSWE?
      • Nothing new really, but I did add the CSWE as an additional ref note for some of the statements.
    • Explain how the Exile escaped from the Sith assassins and give some mention about just who her companions were.
      • Explained.
    • Very,very comprehensive. Great job, Cylka. DC 19:49, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
      • Thanks for looking it over, DC. Cylka-talk- 18:27, 24 February 2009 (UTC)
  3. Eyrezer:
    • What do you mean by "covering approximately one-fourth of the planet," in relation to a spacestation? (Restoration section)
      • Explained.
        • Is this based off the images, or is there dialogue or something that states it?
          • Since I couldn't find the actual source and the person responsible for this piece of information is unavailable, I removed it.
            • Cool. With a 2D image of a 3D object, it just seemed a bit hard to determine its size.
    • "offered generously small bid-estimates for resupply and security contracts." This doesn't make sense. I think small should be low, but I also think the word generous is out of place, as it was not actually from generosity at all.
      • Changed.
    • Could you reword the start of the final paragraph of Restoration so that the focus is on the planet first, rather than on the Exile?
      • Reworded.
    • "entering a period of peace and gratification." What do you mean by gratification?
      • Removed gratification. I'm not even sure who inserted that one.
    • The image of the Telos Holocron needs to be moved to a more appropriate location, or removed if it will be too crowded.
      • Removed, as there isn't enough room for it in the appropriate section.
    • Some of the content in the Thani section seems more appropriate for the Citadel Station section.
      • All of it is removed, since it was essentially a repeat of the Citadel Station section. I have absolutely no idea who moved that information into there.
    • Add a section for Angelbay Station to the locations section.
      • Created a section. Cylka-talk- 06:53, 23 February 2009 (UTC)
    • The start of the Bts detailing the first appearances of the planet is a little unclear. Could you rewrite this? --Eyrezer 03:09, 23 February 2009 (UTC)
      • Rewritten and expanded.
      • Thanks for the review, Eyrezer. Cylka-talk- 18:27, 24 February 2009 (UTC)

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