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- Nominated by: Jinzler 19:34, November 12, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: A droid information broker
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- JangFett (Talk) 01:28, January 26, 2012 (UTC)
Good stuff. Menkooroo 04:25, January 30, 2012 (UTC)- —Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 21:31, February 15, 2012 (UTC) - Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 10:24, February 23, 2012 (UTC) - Will Smith's new movie? ~Savage 21:17, February 25, 2012 (UTC)
- Plagueis327 18:20, February 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:54, March 4, 2012 (UTC)
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Jangeth
Because you refer to the droid as "he" in the intro, and per the infobox, could you mention that he had Masculine programming in the intro? JangFett (Talk) 19:48, December 28, 2011 (UTC)- Fixed. Thanks for your review. --Jinzler 19:40, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
Savaged…
Is there a synonym you could use for "storage bay" after you first mention the Deep Storage Bay V14 in the bio?I've had a look through the source and it seems to only refer to the bay as a "storage bay" or a "deep storage bay." I've thought long and hard about a possible synonym that I could use here, but nothing obvious has came to mind and I am unwilling to refer to the bay by any term that is not fully supported by the source. Unfortunately, I therefore don't think there is much that can be done about this, unless you know of some generic "storage bay" synonyms that could be applicable; there don't appear to be many of them. --Jinzler 19:34, February 25, 2012 (UTC)- Since "storage bay" is in the title, why not just say, "in Deep Storage Bay V14, on a level of the station..."? Would that work? I'm mostly not comfortable with using its title to describe what it is, so maybe no explanation is necessary. ~Savage 20:09, February 25, 2012 (UTC)
- I was concerned that reviewers of the article would ask for some context here. I have removed the description for now, because I agree with you that the name is fairly self-explanatory and I don't won't to make an issue of such a minor point. However, if any other reviewers request that further context be given on the nature of the bay, I will be forced to re-add this description. Would that be okay with you? --Jinzler 20:38, February 25, 2012 (UTC)
- I think it shouldn't be necessary, but if someone seems to really want context on it, we can surely think of a synonym, like "area for storage" or something. But it's better not to be repetitive in my opinion. ~Savage 21:17, February 25, 2012 (UTC)
- I think it shouldn't be necessary, but if someone seems to really want context on it, we can surely think of a synonym, like "area for storage" or something. But it's better not to be repetitive in my opinion. ~Savage
- I was concerned that reviewers of the article would ask for some context here. I have removed the description for now, because I agree with you that the name is fairly self-explanatory and I don't won't to make an issue of such a minor point. However, if any other reviewers request that further context be given on the nature of the bay, I will be forced to re-add this description. Would that be okay with you? --Jinzler 20:38, February 25, 2012 (UTC)
- Since "storage bay" is in the title, why not just say, "in Deep Storage Bay V14, on a level of the station..."? Would that work? I'm mostly not comfortable with using its title to describe what it is, so maybe no explanation is necessary. ~Savage
I'm a fan of always giving folks' species on first mention, but I think it's definitely helpful in places where one character is named by species and another is named nearby. With that in mind, with Ganga Lor marked as a Chevin, would it make sense to mark Byra Fenn as a Human? Ditto Igren Demos, since his name appears soon after someone described as a Hutt.- Done --Jinzler 19:34, February 25, 2012 (UTC)
In BTS, maybe use the credit template? I'm not sure if there's a rule about this, so this is just a suggestion. ~Savage 17:57, February 25, 2012 (UTC)- I'm uncertain as well, but Graeston's comment here suggests that it is at the writer's discretion. However, because the credit template is already used earlier in the article, I have now added it to the BTS as well, for the sake of consistency. Thank you for your review, please let me know if you have any further concerns with the article. --Jinzler 19:34, February 25, 2012 (UTC)
- Looks good to me! ~Savage 20:09, February 25, 2012 (UTC)
- Looks good to me! ~Savage
- I'm uncertain as well, but Graeston's comment here suggests that it is at the writer's discretion. However, because the credit template is already used earlier in the article, I have now added it to the BTS as well, for the sake of consistency. Thank you for your review, please let me know if you have any further concerns with the article. --Jinzler 19:34, February 25, 2012 (UTC)
Toprawa
Please consider inserting paragraph breaks in the intro and first biography paragraph at some point.Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:03, March 4, 2012 (UTC)- Done, thanks for your review! --Jinzler 19:44, March 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Glad to help. :) Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:54, March 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Done, thanks for your review! --Jinzler 19:44, March 4, 2012 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 20:54, March 4, 2012 (UTC)