Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Sora Bulq/Legends

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Sora Bulq

(6 Inq/2 User/8 Total)

Support

1. Havac 04:48, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
2. Why not just put up all your articles at once? Cull Tremayne 16:46, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
   • I'm putting them up as I finish tweaking them. Expect Jace Dallin later today and Soontir Fel sometime after that; Agen Kolar and BoShek are still waiting on images from Culator. Havac 18:24, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
3. Adamwankenobi 23:19, 1 September 2007 (UTC)
4. Greyman^(Paratus) 18:29, 4 September 2007 (UTC)
5. Thefourdotelipsis 06:07, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
6. Sora Bulq is a tragic hero. I vote support despite the presence of an accursed redlink. -- Darth Culator ^(Talk) 18:07, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
7. Milo Fett^[Comlink] 00:18, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
8. Imperialles 13:31, 15 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose

1. Mate, I got to the second "Bulq was tapped" and stopped. You've got to find a better word, one that doesn't have a second, hilarious meaning. Thefourdotelipsis 12:23, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
   • Apparently adding one word in for clarification is tantamount to eating babies. Thefourdotelipsis 06:35, 3 September 2007 (UTC)
2. Just a few minor things:
   • Please provide a reference tag in the infobox where it lists Dooku as his Dark Jedi master.
   • From the BtS, is it possible to reword this sentence? Right now it seems a little off to me: "…Windu was able to end the fight as soon as he decided that he should with a well-placed Force Push."
   • Otherwise, it looks good. Greyman^(Paratus) 15:20, 4 September 2007 (UTC)
     • See how you like that. Havac 17:40, 4 September 2007 (UTC)
       • Better, thanks. Greyman^(Paratus) 18:29, 4 September 2007 (UTC)
3. Bulq awakened and sought out Windu, but Windu and the other Jedi had fled under attack from Bulq's service droids. - I don't like the smell of this phrase. Namely the repetition of "Windu". Thefourdotelipsis 05:03, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
   • I suppose I could use a he, but I'm wary of confusion regarding its antecedent. It should work, though. Consider it changed. Havac 05:56, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
4. When Quinlan Vos joined the ranks of the Dark Acolytes at around the same time as the VCD987 incident, Bulq attested to the fact that Vos had a not inconsiderable darkness within him, as he had discovered in his Vaapad-fueled test of Vos. - Too wordy, and not succinct enough. Thefourdotelipsis 05:31, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
   • Already addressed. Havac 05:56, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
5. Tholme transmitted the information the facility to Secura before Bulq found and attacked him. Tholme attempted to talk his companion at Bakura back to the light, but Bulq revealed his corruption on Bakura and the false nature of his rescue of Tholme to the Jedi Master. - Tholme + Tholme = Me No Likey. Thefourdotelipsis 05:48, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
   • Again, me no likey antecedent confusion even more. I'll see about getting some other descriptors in there, though. Havac 05:56, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
6. Can we get a better scan of the infobox image? (File:BulqHeadshot.jpg) (Rule 15) --Imperialles 18:34, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
7. Just two minor objections
   • (From 1.1) ";whether this was in fact the case, whether Bulq had done so under the unconscious influence of the dark side, or if it had been a deliberate ploy by Bulq to lead Vos down the dark path was unclear." This sentence should be reworded to change the two whethers.
   • This isn't an objection, but I don't like the redlink.
   • Other than those, good work. Hobbes15^{(Tiger Headquarters)} 21:41, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
     • See how you like that. Havac 22:37, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
       • Much better. Hobbes15^{(Tiger Headquarters)} 03:30, 10 September 2007 (UTC)

Comments

Approved by Inquisitorius 13:43, 15 September 2007 (UTC)