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Skorr

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Goodwood Redstarbird (Alliance Intelligence) 18:54, 12 May 2008 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Greyman@wikiajanitor(Talk) 00:38, 15 May 2008 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:49, 16 May 2008 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Master Aban Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 02:26, 18 May 2008 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Thefourdotelipsis 00:27, 1 June 2008 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Graestan(Talk) 02:01, 2 June 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

  1. From the Merciless Hammer of Toprawa:
    • The dual usage of "escape" so close here kind of reads awkwardly. Please reword: "allowing Solo to escape. Skorr escaped"
    • Please pipelink whatever system we are talking about here: "operative who was working in the system"
    • I would like to see a little bit detailing that after being imprisoned on Kessel, he harbored a great deal of hatred for the Empire as well as Solo
    • I'm a bit uneasy here calling him a Jedi Knight, since technically he isn't at this point in time. Please reword: "lightsaber in the hopes that the Jedi Knight would" Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:41, 14 May 2008 (UTC)
    • Also, you really should reference the bit in the BTS that lists other bounty hunters as the Ord Mantell hunter
    • Here are some bits of dialogue from two sources I've just added. The second one, specifically, has something that could be added:
      • From The Empire Strikes Back: The National Public Radio Dramatization: "That bounty hunter we ran into on Ord Mantell? Well, he changed my mind. Strangers blazing away at me from all directions have always made me a little nervous."
      • Star Wars 39: in the scene mirroring that from the film where Solo tells Rieekan that he has to leave and if he doesn't pay off Jabba the Hutt he's a dead man, it's changed around a little bit, but could still be worked in. While walking to the base's command center, he passes an officer referred only to as "Major," though I'm going to assume it's intended to be Derlin, since he looks exactly like him, and "Derlin" asks him if he's thinking about leaving again, and Solo says yes, to which the Major replies, "Yes, we heard about that bounty hunter on Ord Mantell. A death mark is not an easy thing to live with...," obviously taken from Rieekan's lines. You could say something like the Rebels of Echo Base were well versed in Solo's tangle with Skorr," or whatever you want. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:16, 14 May 2008 (UTC)
        • I think I've sorted all that. About the BtS referencing, they're all mentioned in the DB entry, so I've just added that as a ref. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 10:27, 16 May 2008 (UTC)
  2. Grass clippings:
    • The last sentence of the intro is awkward; please reword.
    • "that left the left side" is also somewhat ungainly.
    • Hurlo Holowan needs a little setup.
    • "had natural chemistries that meant the poison was not lethal to them" should be reworded a bit less casually.
    • Slave I needs some context.
    • "Skorr realized that Kestrel was among the Rebel recruits, and, hoping to gain his revenge as well as her bounty, the bounty hunters began firing on the ship, which was able to flee, though, leaving Skorr furious." – This needs to be reworked, with more clarification.
    • "The Rebels took advantage of this momentary confusion, and a small cargo flyer piloted by Chewbacca arrived at the safehouse, which had been flying at the bottom of the canyon, and Gribbet's sensors had been unable to detect it." – Please reword and clarify.
    • Graestan(Talk) 00:48, 31 May 2008 (UTC)

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