Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Shashay

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Shashay

  • Nominated by: --Skippy Farlstendoiro 04:12, July 14, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: They can sing their way through hyperspace. Serious.

(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:32, July 19, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote --Eyrezer 03:06, July 26, 2010 (UTC)
  3. The original rockin' robins. ~ SavageBob 17:39, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
  4. -- 1358 (Talk) 13:18, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Made some spelling corrections. And did you know about a certain avian who was the talk of the town? Everyone knows about the avian. The avian is the talk of the town. Trak Nar Ramble on 05:49, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Cylka-talk- 05:56, September 19, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 07:01, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
  8. Inqvote —Xwing328(Talk) 19:23, September 26, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Attack of the Floyd
  • Are the periods at the end of tidbits in the infobox really necessary? Seeing "Crytal Nest." in the Homeworld field is rather odd.
  • I see some underlinking; mostly things like species and starship.
  • Many of the paragraphs in the History section need to be merged. There are unnecessary paragraph breaks every three sentences; its rather ridiculous.
  • "The Shashay were galaxy-wide famous because of their singing skills, their harmonious movements and their flaming personalities." Flaming personalities? I can think of only one meaning for "flaming personality", and I don't think its what you intend. Change the wording.
  • "They rarely felt the need to visit other planets, but nevertheless most of them were forbidden to leave Crytal Nest." Why were the forbidden to leave? Clarify.
  • The mention of the moniker "Space Singers" in the body does not need to be bolded.
  • That's all. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:43, July 16, 2010 (UTC)
Chack
  • Needs to use "quote" template for the main quote, and links need to be removed from quotes. They shouldn't be added unless they are absolutely necessary, and they're not in this case. Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:37, July 16, 2010 (UTC)
    • Uh... Replaced deprecated template with a different template for Dialogue per here. I can't find a way to have several speakers with a "Quote" template. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:41, July 17, 2010 (UTC)
    • Links removed (even if I think they are necessary, because those items are not mentioned nor linked in the main body). --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:41, July 17, 2010 (UTC)
      • I'll fix the main quote for you; I know how to format it using "quote." Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:13, July 18, 2010 (UTC)
Eyrezer
  • Fingers/toes?
  • The Bts could do with an intro sentence detailing who wrote The Abduction and who illustrated the Shashay. --Eyrezer 01:56, July 23, 2010 (UTC)
Prepare to be savaged...
  • The introductory quote is awfully long... Any reason it can't be trimmed? I'm open to arguments for it; it just triggered a visceral response due to its length.
    • You twitter fans are too used to short sentences :P Just jokin'. Trimmed.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 17:25, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
  • Can the "Biology and appearance" image caption be amended a bit to make it say something about the species' appearance? Right now, the caption doesn't seem to make the case that that placement is the correct one.
  • B&A can be beefed up a bit with some more details from the images. For example, the section currently makes no mention of the crest of feathers atop the head, the shape of the beak, the nostrils in the beak, the eyes being on the sides of the head, the fact that their forearms and lower legs appear to be featherless, the way their legs bend backward at the "knee" (or not, depending on which image one follows), etc.
  • When you use the term "increased damage," can you specify increased in comparison to what?
    • Changed.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 17:25, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
      • It's still a bit confusing. Is there any reason why it's not enough to simply mention they have these natural weapons that can be used in melee? In other words, what's the use of saying that they can choose to use or not to use these weapons? I think it's implied that someone who has a weapon can choose to use it or not. ~ SavageBob 17:33, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
  • A sentence or so on evolutionary history is in order for the "History" section.
  • When I did Quor'sav, I mentioned their susceptibility to air pollution under "B&A". Maybe do so here too?
  • Should the paragraph on their Coruscant community go under history? It seems like "In the galaxy" material to me (though I could be wrong!).
    • I'd rather not. It's mentioned under ITG, but I think it's history: Shashay during the Clone Wars, Shashay decide to stop living outside Crytal Nest, Shashay return to Crytal Nest, Shashay re-discovered... I see it as History. Not changed.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 17:25, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
  • Link and article for the female scout pilot?
  • Any reason that both depictions of the species (human-like legs and bird-like legs) can't be considered canon? If I had expanded the article, I would have indicated that there are two variants in the species' physiology rather than implying that one depiction is correct and the other incorrect. That's it! Tweet! ~ SavageBob 13:25, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
Cylka
  • They threatened to surrender the ships to Moff Owen to ask them for help - This sentence reads a bit awkwardly.
  • I made a few minor wording changes and I hope that they are acceptable. Feel free to change them back if you are unsatisfied. Otherwise, nice article. Cylka-talk- 05:54, September 16, 2010 (UTC)
From the cockpit of Xwing328
  • I don't like this sentence: "While some Shashay had avian legs with a joint in its back..." You're going from plural "legs" to singular "its." I know what you're trying to get at, but for all anyone else knows, this could mean the bird had one joint in its back, not a joint in the back of each leg. Same thing with the next part of the sentence.
  • "Not only were they weaker in combat." Do go on...? That's a sentence fragment if you ask me. Also, it doesn't flow well with the pollution sentence right after it but seems to be related to the next melee combat sentence. Maybe rearrange some things.
  • Can you finish categorizing the images?
    • Strange objection. Better?--Skippy Farlstendoiro 14:37, September 19, 2010 (UTC)
      • Strange, but kinda vaguely implied by Rule 12. It used to be enforced a bit more closely when we initially added those fields. I was more thinking the cat artists (if known) and cat type fields. —Xwing328(Talk) 02:31, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
  • Cheers! —Xwing328(Talk) 06:44, September 19, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 02:31, September 27, 2010 (UTC)