- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Shannon Voorson
- Nominated by: Chack Jadson (Talk) 18:53, 20 December 2008 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Shaaa-none!
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Support
Ah, what an annoying little girl. Cull Tremayne 20:26, 11 January 2009 (UTC)
Graestan(Talk) 21:17, 14 January 2009 (UTC)
Yay for twerpy little nine-year old rebels! Objections addressed on IRC. — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 17:25, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
Little girls or not. Anything 3 ABY is gold. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:28, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
What a goofy character. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 20:46, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
Object
- Toprawa:
You could definitely include this image in there near the end.Kind of minor, but I'd like to see something in the P/T detailing how in the beginning of the story she learns of the six new Star Destroyers being completed and dislikes their names and finds the Empire unimaginative, etc., and what she would rather have named them as. Other than that, nice job. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:41, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
- From the desk of Atarumaster88
Can we have an "older" or "younger" tossed in there for her cousin in the intro?- Done. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:01, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
"expressing disgust at the destruction of the planet Alderaan simply as a show of force" Some awkward wording here.- Tweaked. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:01, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
" she failed to alert the techs that the generator's time had been moved up" Time to what?- Fixed. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:06, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
"She was very intelligent for her age." POV.- I do believe that's exactly what the post-story notes assert, and if so it wouldn't be POV at all. Chack would need to check on this, though. 19:45, 20 January 2009 (UTC) Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:01, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
- The AJ says "Shannon's advanced intellectual abilities..." If you still think it needs changing, Ataru, I'll reword it. —Unsigned comment by Chack Jadson (talk • contribs)
- I tossed in a word that fixes the problem from my perspective. Atarumaster88
(Talk page) 20:46, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
- I tossed in a word that fixes the problem from my perspective. Atarumaster88
- The AJ says "Shannon's advanced intellectual abilities..." If you still think it needs changing, Ataru, I'll reword it. —Unsigned comment by Chack Jadson (talk • contribs)
- I do believe that's exactly what the post-story notes assert, and if so it wouldn't be POV at all. Chack would need to check on this, though. 19:45, 20 January 2009 (UTC) Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:01, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
- Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88
(Talk page) 16:54, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
Comments
- She's referred to by first name because there's no other way to do it. And as for reffing one thing Slaying Dragons, and another Adventure Journal, the AJ stuff is just a small character bio in the magazine, but not part of the story. Chack Jadson (Talk) 18:53, 20 December 2008 (UTC)
- Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 20:46, 20 January 2009 (UTC)