- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Salporin
(5 Inq/4 Users/9 Total)
Support
- -- AdmirableAckbar [Talk] 18:38, 25 November 2007 (UTC)
- Adamwankenobi 06:17, 26 November 2007 (UTC)
- Yay for awesome retconery! -- Ozzel 23:56, 30 November 2007 (UTC)
He sure is dopey-looking.—Graestan(This party's over) 16:17, 1 December 2007 (UTC)- Good stuff. Thefourdotelipsis 21:58, 6 December 2007 (UTC)
- Janeway 21:24, 17 December 2007 (UTC)
- Atarumaster88
(Talk page) 04:42, 18 December 2007 (UTC) - Hobbes(Tiger's Lair) 21:04, 19 December 2007 (UTC)
- -- Darth Culator (Talk) 04:17, 24 December 2007 (UTC)
Oppose
Uh... Leia's already married by the time of the Thrawn trilogy. You keep calling her "Organa."—Graestan(This party's over) 04:04, 30 November 2007 (UTC)- I think I had a reason for that, but I can't think of what exactly it was at the minute. Perhaps to differentiate between her and Han. Anyway, addressed. -- AdmirableAckbar [Talk] 23:55, 30 November 2007 (UTC)
Actually, that should read "Organa Solo", as she has two surnames. Also, you should use Ralrracheen's full name whenever referring to him. Thefourdotelipsis 22:33, 1 December 2007 (UTC)- Both addressed. -- AdmirableAckbar [Talk] 16:18, 3 December 2007 (UTC)
File:RalrraSalporin-HttE comic.jpg needs to be re-scanned—it's distorted.--Imperialles 10:14, 2 December 2007 (UTC)- Would it be acceptable just to remove it, at least temporarily, so the nom may be approved? No-one really seems to have the comic, though I believe Redemption is in the process of getting it. Anyway, what do you think about that? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 06:38, 25 December 2007 (UTC)
- Sure, as long as the same, low-quality version is not re-added at a later point. --Imperialles 10:34, 30 December 2007 (UTC)
- Okay, removed it. Hopefully a higher-quality image will be uploaded, at whcih point I'll re-add it. Thanks, -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 01:13, 1 January 2008 (UTC)
- Sure, as long as the same, low-quality version is not re-added at a later point. --Imperialles 10:34, 30 December 2007 (UTC)
- Would it be acceptable just to remove it, at least temporarily, so the nom may be approved? No-one really seems to have the comic, though I believe Redemption is in the process of getting it. Anyway, what do you think about that? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 06:38, 25 December 2007 (UTC)
- From the desk of Atarumaster88
Awkward wording regarding weaponry in first paragraph of biography. Please reword.- Addressed, I think.
"while Chewbacca left Kashyyyk to venture into the outside world." Figure of speech this may be, but "outside world" sounds pretty silly in Star Wars.- Changed to offworld.
Reword or remove this sentence. "His blade skills proved useful in both professions, and he became a revered member of each of them. "- Removed.
Remove colloquialisms in "Salporin had arranged for Chewbacca and Organa Solo to stay in his house, where they would be able to keep their heads down and lay low for a time."- Removed.
Reword. "Salporin greeted his friend with strong hugs, though he paid Organa Solo little heed; he was still wary of Humans after his time as a slave of the Empire. Nevertheless, he happily escorted them to his home, joyful at having finally met with Chewbacca again." Tone and descriptive words do not flow with the rest of the article.- Addressed.
- Not quite there. Among other things, the use of "greeted" twice in a row doesn't bode well. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 03:20, 16 December 2007 (UTC)
- Better? Sorry it's been so long; computer access isn't plentiful in where I am. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 04:33, 18 December 2007 (UTC)
- Not quite there. Among other things, the use of "greeted" twice in a row doesn't bode well. Atarumaster88
- Addressed.
Better explanation of how a stunner killed Salporin when the other Wookiees don't seem too harmed.- Zahn doesn't offer one.
"Extremely brave" in P&T is POV.- Addressed.
"Salporin's friendship with Chewbacca was immense, and the two trusted each other endlessly; their faith in each other's abilities allowed them to work together on many an occasion.[2][5][6] The two also spent much time testing each other physically, which went a long way to making them such powerful warriors." Paragraph does not flow well; please reword.- Addressed.
"His blade skills proved useful in both professions, and he became a revered member of each of them." Explain this sentence or reword it. Or remove it.- See above.
- Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 19:14, 14 December 2007 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:41, 14 December 2007 (UTC)
Comments
Approved by Inquisitorius 22:44, 4 January 2008 (UTC)