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Sabé
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Support
- Thefourdotelipsis 11:54, 26 April 2008 (UTC)
Lord Hydronium 12:34, 28 April 2008 (UTC)- Clears up Episode I confusion well Enochf 17:56, 6 May 2008 (UTC)
- Jedimca0(Do or Do Not, There is No Try) 08:57, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
- Dibs on Eirtaé Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:46, 8 May 2008 (UTC)
- Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:55, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
Graestan(Talk) 23:45, 10 May 2008 (UTC)- -- Darth Culator (Talk) 04:06, 11 May 2008 (UTC)
Oppose
- From the Throne Room of Chack Jadson:
The second paragraph in Biography reads awkwardly. It jumps around, and the last half really doesn't flow. Ask if you need more clarification. Chack Jadson (Talk) 20:21, 6 May 2008 (UTC)- I need more clarification. :P Thefourdotelipsis 08:29, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
- "Due to her role as Amidala's decoy, Sabé was considered to be the most important of the Queen's bodyguards. During her time as a handmaiden, Sabé became close friends with Amidala." Those two sentences interrupt the flow of the article. I'd suggest putting them at the end, where IMO they'd fit much better. Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:02, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
- The end of the paragraph, or the intro? Thefourdotelipsis 07:23, 8 May 2008 (UTC)
- The end of that paragraph. Chack Jadson (Talk) 21:51, 8 May 2008 (UTC)
- Ah, of course. I don't know what I was thinking. Fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 02:13, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
- The end of that paragraph. Chack Jadson (Talk) 21:51, 8 May 2008 (UTC)
- The end of the paragraph, or the intro? Thefourdotelipsis 07:23, 8 May 2008 (UTC)
- "Due to her role as Amidala's decoy, Sabé was considered to be the most important of the Queen's bodyguards. During her time as a handmaiden, Sabé became close friends with Amidala." Those two sentences interrupt the flow of the article. I'd suggest putting them at the end, where IMO they'd fit much better. Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:02, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
- I need more clarification. :P Thefourdotelipsis 08:29, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
- From Graestan the Mighty:
"perfected … perfectly" in the intro is a bit awkward; please change.- Changed the second to "accurately."
File:Nottonyscott.jpg should be recaptured.- "We have top men working on it now." "Who?" "Top...men." (Not Top himself, by the way. Unless he has the HD versions and is willing to do it. ;) Thefourdotelipsis 08:29, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
- OK, done.
- "We have top men working on it now." "Who?" "Top...men." (Not Top himself, by the way. Unless he has the HD versions and is willing to do it. ;) Thefourdotelipsis 08:29, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
Were not the blasters concealed in the Queen's throne itself? I am confused.- So they are.
Calling her an "extremely talented impersonator" in the P&T after making it sound as though her Amidala was a one-shot, luck-of-the-draw sort of thing in the bio doesn't mesh.- Nice BtS. I likee. Loved the article, actually. Private admission: I like Episode I. Graestan(Talk) 03:25, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
- Private admission: So do I. ;)
- From the Merciless Hammer of Toprawa:
This seems to read that she, along with her handmaidens, was the first in line, with them, to take the Queen's place. This sentence should be tweaked a little bit to more clearly separate that she was the most important handmaiden, independent of the others: "Along with the other handmaidens, Sabé was trained to serve as both an attendant and a bodyguard, and she was chosen to be the first in line to take the Queen's place in times of crisis, as a decoy."- I sorta see what you're getting at here; would "amongst her colleagues" work better here? Because it's stated that all of the handmaidens were trained to serve as decoys. In FF, if memory serves.
- What if you said something like, "...and as at the most important handmaiden, she was chosen..."?
- Yes, good. Although to avoid the repetition of "handmaiden" I've used "as the most important member of her group." Will that do, I should I just use "handmaiden"? Thefourdotelipsis 07:27, 8 May 2008 (UTC)
- I would just go with "handmaiden," which I don't think sounds too repetitive, but not that big of a deal and really up to you. Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:46, 8 May 2008 (UTC)
- Yes, good. Although to avoid the repetition of "handmaiden" I've used "as the most important member of her group." Will that do, I should I just use "handmaiden"? Thefourdotelipsis 07:27, 8 May 2008 (UTC)
- What if you said something like, "...and as at the most important handmaiden, she was chosen..."?
- I sorta see what you're getting at here; would "amongst her colleagues" work better here? Because it's stated that all of the handmaidens were trained to serve as decoys. In FF, if memory serves.
You've got two paragraphs in a row beginning "Upon..." Please reword one to mix it up a little- Reworded.
I believe these guns were in the arm of the throne itself: "allowed Amidala retrieve the weapons hidden in the Queen's desk."- Yes they were. Fixed.
You might add a little bit someplace explaining the little bit from the Ep I Visual Dictionary of how her "distinctive battle dress allowed her maximum movement," but otherwise glad to see you got the info from there. ;)Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:14, 7 May 2008 (UTC)- Eh...I'm not all that sure on this one. Wore battle garb during battle? To me, it would read like detail for detail's sake at the expense of...well, significance. Thefourdotelipsis 08:29, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
- Agreed. This is probably something that belongs in the handmaiden article...which I am suddenly interested in doing after reading this. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:31, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
Waitasec … I thought R2 interacted with Sabé after saving the ship in the blockade. There is no mention in the article. Graestan(Talk) 00:49, 9 May 2008 (UTC)- Yeah, it's in there now. Thefourdotelipsis 13:27, 10 May 2008 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 05:01, 11 May 2008 (UTC)
- This one's a bit of a golden oldie that I've recently expanded and revised, but it might seem like a bit of a Frankincense monster at the moment. I understand that the intro looks a bit big, but that's basically the nature of the beast, as it wouldn't really do to just summarize with "And she was her decoy for that thingy. Yeah." Also, if you see anything objectively wrong with the article, don't hesitate to change it! I'm not too protective of this. :) Thefourdotelipsis 11:54, 26 April 2008 (UTC)