Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Phuii

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Phuii

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Imperialles 16:52, May 13, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote --Eyrezer 09:27, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Phuii, that was close. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:50, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Chack Jadson (Talk) 15:31, May 30, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Thefourdotelipsis 23:14, May 30, 2010 (UTC)
  6. NAYAYEN:TALK 13:05, June 2, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote Best. Species. Name. Ever. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 19:56, June 4, 2010 (UTC)

Object

A few things:
  • Intro: "One of these was Nep Chung"; "One of these was Mars Guo" Two sentences starting with the same phrase in quick succession.
  • Biology and appearance: "For example, an individual might have one major skin tone" This seems to be a tense error.
  • History: "However, their world lie beyond the regions" Typo.
  • Linking: A few instances of linking to redirects. The areas affected are BTS, Appearances and Notes and references.
  • Good read! --Imperialles 01:11, May 13, 2010 (UTC)
    • Thanks for the review! Everything should be addressed. Were there any other faulty link other than the DVD one and the Star Wars: Episode I Racer one? ~ SavageBob 16:49, May 13, 2010 (UTC)
      • A couple more, but I took care of them. --Imperialles 16:52, May 13, 2010 (UTC)
Farlstendoiro and more aliens
  • Bio: "Phuii stood about 1.5 meters tall." Are you sure? Ares Nune seems to tower over the typical 6-feet clone, and Vigo Chung also seems quite tall to me.
  • The intro quote mentions "General Ares Noon". Is this a typo? A misspelling of Ares Nune? Maybe you should mention "Ares Nune, aka Ares Noon" in the body?
  • Did you check Secrets of Tatooine? I think that book listed all the movie's podracers for their (quite bad) "RPG podracing rules", so there must be something on Mars.
  • That all.Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:19, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
    • The images are misleading as to Nune's and Chung's heights. The angle of the clone image, for instance, is such that Nune is standing further back on a sloped platform or something. It's a poorly drawn panel, really. Other images show that he is shorter than the clone. As Guo's height is the only one we know with any certainty, I've used that one. The Nune/Noon thing is fixed; that was dissonance from Cecil Noone in the Lamproid nom. :) And as for the Mars Guo stats, I've pinged you on your talk page for some help! ~ SavageBob 15:18, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
    • Help has been received, and RPG stats have been alluded to. ~ SavageBob 01:08, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
Jinzler
  • A Phuii appears on p. 174 of The Clone Wars: Decide Your Destiny: Dooku's Secret Army. I've added this to the source list and I'll add the info from this source somewhen in the next few days, unless someone else does --Jinzler 17:44, May 25, 2010 (UTC)
    • Yes, please do; it'd be much appreciated. I can't find that book anywhere! ~ SavageBob 00:59, May 26, 2010 (UTC)
      • Added --Jinzler 22:48, May 26, 2010 (UTC)
Thefourdotelipsis

There's too much detail on Mars Guo, I think, especially since he would seemingly have very little to do with the history of the Phuii. I think a Phuii in the galaxy section would be much better for detailing the specific movements of these Phuii, since the history of the species as a whole seems rather scant. If this can just be reshuffled a bit, and perhaps a bit of the detail on Guo cut down, it's otherwise excellent. Thefourdotelipsis 15:09, May 30, 2010 (UTC)

  • Any better? I've cut Guo info down by about a third, unless you were referring to the BTS stuff as well. Thanks for taking a look. ~ SavageBob 22:34, May 30, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

  • I've never heard this word before, so I'm asking: does the source specifically use "supraplanetary?" Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:00, May 21, 2010 (UTC)
    • Well, I was trying to find a word to indicate an entity made up of multiple planets. The word is used in the same sense as supranational, as seen here. If it rankles, I can change it, but I'm not sure what a good replacement would be. ~ SavageBob 01:56, May 22, 2010 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 19:56, June 4, 2010 (UTC)