Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Peto Kelsan

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Peto Kelsan

Nominated by: Kreivi Wolter 19:40, June 26, 2011 (UTC)
Nomination comments: I claim no credit for making this now-over-1300-word article. I only added few date refs. Only nominating this since Harrar has been inactive, and I was adviced to do it.

The double refs in the infobox are not needed. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 01:13, July 25, 2011 (UTC)

In the intro, the Galactic Alliance Remnant is called "the previous galactic government," which is misleading and actually a little incorrect --- the Fel Empire was briefly the galactic government in 130 ABY before Darth Krayt's Galactic Empire took over; additionally, the Galactic Alliance Remnant is not the same as the Galactic Alliance. Take a look at the sentence and try to rejig the context on the GAR to make it a little smoother.
An important note: The Fel Empire only existed until 130 ABY; afterward, Fel led the Empire-in-exile. The intro currently has some pipelinking issues in this regard.
Is his hair just blond/grey? I swear there's some brown in there somewhere. :)
Darth Krayt's Galactic Empire isn't linked anywhere in the intro or body. In the body, I think it has a place at the end of the first paragraph: You should probably explicitly mention what the two camps were (Krayt's Empire and the Empire-in-exile). In the intro... be creative.
More to come! Menkooroo 15:03, July 25, 2011 (UTC)

Could somebody kindly remove this nomination? Kreivi Wolter 10:34, August 3, 2011 (UTC)