Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Peppi Bow/Legends

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Peppi Bow

• Nominated by: Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 22:46, April 22, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: [Redacted by administration]

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. Nayayen—TALK 09:46, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
2. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 01:44, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
3. Clean as usual. Good job. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:40, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
4. That's just kriffin' messed up.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 20:34, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
5. [Redacted by administration] Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(We seed the stars)} 01:36, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
6. [Redacted by administration] Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:00, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
7. [Redacted by administration] JangFett ^(Talk) 17:38, May 7, 2010 (UTC)

Object

1. IFYLOFD:
   • "Shortly after the beginning of the Clone Wars, the Gungan's herd became skittish when near the eastern swamps, in much the same way they had during the Trade Federation's Invasion of Naboo ten years prior." Why would this be a concern? Clarify.
     • Done.
   • "and after they were captured by Confederate forces," After who were captured? Bow? The politicians? All three? Clarify.
     • Clarified.
   • "she noticed a change in her animal's behavior when they neared the eastern swamps" What kind of change? Clarify.
     • Clarified.
   • That's it. Good job. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 22:42, April 24, 2010 (UTC)
     • Thanks for the review! Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 19:12, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
2. One thing, "...who returned to the planet to discern the origins of the battle droids". This seems like it could be better worded. Right now, it sounds like they're trying to find the droid's maker (or something like that) rather than where these droids were on the planet. Good job otherwise ^_^ Nayayen—TALK 22:27, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
   • It's been altered. Give it a look-see, and thanks for the review. Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 04:35, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
3. Just one: "Vindi—the Confederate scientist who developed the virus—planned to escape the Jedi in a Sheathipede-class shuttle…" Please check the wording here. He planned to escape them? Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(We seed the stars)} 17:25, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
   • Give it a look-see and let me know if that clears it up. Thanks for the review! Darth Trayus^{(Trayus Academy)} 01:34, May 5, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:38, May 16, 2010 (UTC)

• Added CUSWE link for you.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 21:41, April 24, 2010 (UTC)