Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Oshi Karmo

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Oshi Karmo

  • Nominated by: —spookywillowwtalk 22:45, 3 October 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Their level of exhaustion is something I both respect and relate to.
  • Date Archived: 00:02, 14 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 1311 words (203 introduction, 1049 body, 59 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 1308 words (204 introduction, 1045 body, 59 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:NOVELSWP:THRWP:PRIDE

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)

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Support

  1. Inqvote Lewisr (talk) 23:29, 28 December 2023 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Fan26 (Talk) 20:04, 27 January 2024 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 05:31, 28 February 2024 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 09:26, 2 April 2024 (UTC)
  5. Booply (talk) 23:59, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
  6. Panther436 (talk) 00:01, 14 April 2024 (UTC)

Object

Tommy
  • "When Nattai and Keen informed Karmo that Mollo had sent them to send a message" - it's unclear if the "them" is referring to the Jedi pair or Oshi. I'd also try to cut out the repetition of "send/t" if you can.
  • The first mention of day is linked to local day, implying it was not a standard day. Is this intentional? A second mention then links to standard day so I'm a bit confused, as those two are different things.
  • "Sharp" has a lot of different connotations, it could be talking about chic clothing sense, a prickly attitude, overly critical, etc. I assume here it just means clever but I'd recommend swapping it for something less polysemous. Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 11:00, 31 March 2024 (UTC)
    • Should've gotten the three above. I think the day link had been added in a copy-edit but it was intended to just be a local day; which would be intentional in this case.—spookywillowwtalk 21:21, 31 March 2024 (UTC)
Panther
  • Almost just changed this, but I don't think EX droid should be spelled out phonetically in the last bio paragraph just cause it is in the dialogue. The rest of the article just calls it "EX" so it would be more consistent Panther436 (talk) 23:16, 13 April 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:02, 14 April 2024 (UTC)