Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Operation Ringbreaker

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Operation Ringbreaker

  • Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 23:28, 13 July 2023 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: This hunking master plan of Chalis's forms a fair portion of Twilight Company's narrative and becomes a pivotal piece in Hazram Namir's character arc; a lot of stuff to summarise in an article.
  • Date Archived: 15:39, 11 June 2024 (UTC)
  • Final word count: 2826 words (313 introduction, 2501 body, 12 behind the scenes)
  • Word count at nomination time: 2833 words (318 introduction, 2503 body, 12 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:MD, WP:NOVELS, WP:SWBF

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)

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Support

  1. Inqvote —spookywillowwtalk 07:04, 1 February 2024 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Commander Code-8 Hello There! 07:41, 1 February 2024 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Master FredceriqueCommerce Guild(talk) (he/him) 04:11, 24 April 2024 (UTC)
  4. Wok142 (talk) 17:46, 22 May 2024 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Lewisr (talk) 00:50, 5 June 2024 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote Excellent work. Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 15:39, 11 June 2024 (UTC)

Object

Lew
  • I think you should establish from the start in the intro that it was a failed rebel campaign, you don't mention the Alliance until the second paragraph
  • Since the entire camapign was in 3 ABY, do you think it would be moving the begin and end dates into the date field and instead just leaving the battles where it began and ended in those 2 fields?
  • As Nien Nunb is listed as a commander, would it be fair to include the Sullustan resistance somewhere in the infobox? Lewisr (talk) 15:50, 14 August 2023 (UTC)
  • I think the Herald should be added into the Imperial side of the infobox Lewisr (talk) 23:07, 21 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Last thing, the Imperial Navy Troopers and TIE fighters are currently only mentioned in the infobox, can you find a way to slip them in the body somewhere? Lewisr (talk) 19:48, 21 May 2024 (UTC)
Thrawn
  • perhaps File:Unlimited-97thlegion.png would be a better fit than the current image in the "a change in goal" subsection? ThrawnChiss7 Mitth symbol Assembly Cupola 02:34, 16 November 2023 (UTC)
    • Agreed, changed.
  • Haven't read the books but my understanding that the picture mentioned above depicts the early part of the Siege of Inyusu Tor, which is part of the Operation. Therefore the Star Wars: Unlimited card should be listed with {{Po}} in sources? ThrawnChiss7 Mitth symbol Assembly Cupola 02:34, 16 November 2023 (UTC)
    • The legion appears in a series of interludes that cover a trooper on Sullust in the runup to and during the Siege of Inyusu Tor. So we can't confirm that this image is specifically from anything. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 10:34, 5 December 2023 (UTC)
  • I did a text search of BTC, and I didn't find any mention of "Driveyards". Did you mean "Drive Yards"? ThrawnChiss7 Mitth symbol Assembly Cupola 14:35, 7 February 2024 (UTC)
  • What do you think about creating a Drydock/Canon page? ThrawnChiss7 Mitth symbol Assembly Cupola 22:19, 18 March 2024 (UTC)
    • Leaving a note that I'd ended up creating this whilst cleaning out random WantedPages.—spookywillowwtalk 23:37, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
Wok
  • In the intro, "in order to force redeployments from the planet Kuat's security to weaken the shipyards" could be smoother by saying "in order to force redeployments from the planet Kuat's security, weakening the shipyards" (just to not have "in order to" and "to" right near each other). Wok142 (talk) 19:10, 29 April 2024 (UTC)
  • When listing Kuliquo belt in the intro, I think it makes more sense to say "the Kuliquo belt asteroid field" vs. "the asteroid field Kuliquo belt" - looking at the Kuliquo belt page, I think "the" is basically part of the name. Wok142 (talk) 19:10, 29 April 2024 (UTC)
  • First paragraph of Overview, in the sentence "The process of Operation Ringbreaker involved a succession of attacks.." , I feel like "The process of" is redundant and could be deleted. Wok142 (talk) 19:10, 29 April 2024 (UTC)
  • Last sentence of the first paragraph of Overview, what does that mean? I've re-read it a few times and can't grasp it. Wok142 (talk) 19:10, 29 April 2024 (UTC)
    • This is meant to be referring to lines in the book that imply that the campaign took place along the Rimma Trade Route, an implication that is contradicted with a couple of the locations. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 09:41, 21 May 2024 (UTC)
      • I meant this sentence: "Such success was also projected by Chalis to restrain the faction's ability for fast deployment of ground forces." I've got a better understanding of it now but I think it could be smoothed out as well. Something like: "Chalis also projected that the faction's ability to quickly deploy ground forces would be restrained." Wok142 (talk) 16:56, 21 May 2024 (UTC)
  • The sentence that is below the location list in Overview, do you like it isolated below the list or would you rather have it right after the sentence ending with "indirect path to Kuat"? It could work if you stick it into the paragraph but up to you. Wok142 (talk) 19:10, 29 April 2024 (UTC)
  • In The opportunity, rework the sentence mentioning Namir to say: "reunited with Chalis and First Sergeant Hazram Namir, the only survivor of her escort to Hoth." Wok142 (talk) 19:10, 29 April 2024 (UTC)
  • In Setbacks, is the "though" necessary in the second sentence? Wok142 (talk) 19:10, 29 April 2024 (UTC)
Tommy
  • This is looking really good from a quick look over, very much looking forward to my full review. Just a quick preliminary before I start, File:Everi_Chalis.jpg is tagged with Template:Imagequality. Could you have a look to see if this template is accurate and if so please upload a higher quality version. Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 10:35, 25 May 2024 (UTC)
    • The tag is purely because that it's a book scan and not a digital capture. I'll try find a swapover but to my knowledge a book scan is not against policy. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 22:02, 4 June 2024 (UTC)
      • OK, if that's the only reason for the tag then that's not a problem. I just wasn't sure if it was specifically a poor quality scan. Looks much better now anyway. Tommy-Macaroni (he/they) 15:39, 11 June 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 15:39, 11 June 2024 (UTC)

  • Main thing to note is the Overview section, which I believe there might be a few words about. There's nothing in the layout guide covering campaigns to my knowledge and this makes a really good summary of the tactics of the operation in one go. It was inspired by the section's use in Operation Fracture. As for the list thing I made, I did that because it's easier to read than trying to prosify; I for one am not one who likes fishing through paragraphs for info that can just be laid out in a nicer way. Braha'tok enthusiast Hello there 23:28, 13 July 2023 (UTC)