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Nebulon Ranger

Why is the attribution for the Description quote so long? The last part about the shields being a power drain and only usable for short periods of time is given in the section itself so it could probably be jettisoned.
- I disagree. The quote itself wouldn't seem relevant to the following section without the existing level of context, which explains why Tott had to hit the shields.
~~What is the relevance of the taming of the boma beasts? Either mention that they were used as mounts (at least I think they were) or remove it, it's not overly relevant to the ship.~~
- Addressed.
~~I recall the ships specifically being chased by Krath ships as it left, which is more than mentioned here.~~
- Addressed.
~~Is it worth mentioning that Cay wasn't sure if the wrecked ship would explode?~~
- Addressed.
Nothing other than those. Excellent Description section. NAYAYEN^{—it appears to be a frammistat} 14:45, March 13, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 01:36, March 16, 2011 (UTC)

~~Unless Cay's modifications encompassed all of that which you describe, you should start the "Description" section off with details of its stock composition, before telling of Cay's upgrades.~~
- Done.
~~Same section: Your ideas are somewhat scattered between the paragraphs, please compile them. Talk about all of the countermeasures in one part, its design, etc.~~
- Done.
~~Remove much of the extraneous context toward the end of the first "History" para.~~
- I didn't see anything in that paragraph, did you mean another paragraph or the section as a whole?
  - I did mean that paragraph, but after looking at again, it's fine.—Tommy 9281 Wednesday, May 11, 2011, 01:22 UTC
~~Same thing with the "Encounter with the Krath." Rewrite so that the Ranger is the subject, using a tad of that which is currently fluff as context for its participation.~~
- Check it out.
  - On the right track, but could still use some tweaking. Try phrases like, "the Nebulon Ranger was later active in the Naddist rebellion...", or somesuch.—Tommy 9281 Wednesday, May 11, 2011, 01:22 UTC
    - Check it out now. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:59, May 12, 2011 (UTC)
~~And with "Destruction." This isn't the history of the Great Sith War as told by the Nebulon Ranger; this is the history of the Nebulon Ranger during the Great Sith War.~~
- Check it out
Good writing.—Tommy 9281 Sunday, May 1, 2011, 21:22 UTC
- Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 15:45, May 8, 2011 (UTC)

~~Bts: Could you elaborate how and what information those sourcebooks (others than CSWE) gives?~~ –Tm_T ^(Talk) 12:33, May 2, 2011 (UTC)
- Done. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 15:45, May 8, 2011 (UTC)
I wonder if Tommy above is pointing on these already, but, History section: I'm not sure if there's need to describe the Galia-Kira business in such detail, try if the crashing on Onderon would work in a bit compacted context. –Tm_T ^(Talk) 20:10, May 10, 2011 (UTC)
- That part has been shortened. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:59, May 11, 2011 (UTC)

~~The missile and torpedo carrying capacities (eight and six, respectively) are exclusive to the infobox --- should they be listed in the Description section, too?~~
- Addressed.
'Oron Kira and Galia soon consecrated their marriage under the laws of the Galactic Republic," --- this is the first time their marriage is mentioned; can you mention their earlier ceremony in the previous paragraph around the time you introduce Kira?
- Addressed.
~~And just one more: Can you use {{CSWECite}} in both Sources and Notes and references?~~
- Addressed.
Excellent work! Menkooroo 12:43, May 23, 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 00:20, May 25, 2011 (UTC)

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 08:42, May 25, 2011 (UTC)