Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Nas Choka

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Nas Choka

  • Nominated by: Harrar 16:55, 16 August 2008 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Long overdue…

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Inqvote Reads like a history of the Yuuzhan Vong War. Great work. Chack Jadson (Talk) 22:59, 9 September 2008 (UTC)
  2. Inqvote Greyman(Talk) 13:06, 11 October 2008 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Superb. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:26, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
  4. Inqvote -- Darth Culator (Talk) 14:18, 8 November 2008 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Graestan(Talk) 20:22, 8 November 2008 (UTC)

Object

  1. The Anvil:
    • The Journey to War section, first sentence. Choka was a commander of what? For who?
      • Clarified. See watcha think.
    • Next sentence. To whom is this galaxy promised? Where was the Vong fleet approaching from? some context/clarification please.
      • Again, clarified I hope.
    • You have instances of both "Supreme Overlord" and "supreme overlord". I believe it to be the former, so please make sure every instance of the term is capitalized.
      • I'm gonna do this later in the week; it's too much for tonight. Based on The Final Prophecy, and The Unifying Force, I'm going with "Supreme Overlord" all the way through.
    • the living planet persisted;  ?
      • "Stories of the living planet persisted..." Harrar 21:21, 10 September 2008 (UTC)
    • More to come, stay tuned.—Tommy9281 Red lightsaber (Peace is a lie) 03:04, 8 September 2008 (UTC)
      • I look forward to it—thanks for reviewing it. Harrar 21:21, 10 September 2008 (UTC)
  2. LtNOWIS
    • Two sentences that could use rephrasing:
      • "His tactician informed him that the announcement had been made by the priest Harrar, who it had transpired had defected to the Galactic Alliance."
        • Chack got this one.
      • "While he trusted emphatically in the Supreme Overlord, however, Choka was not as convinced by Jamaane's trust in the goddess Yun-Harla, who was believed to have associated with Jaina Solo and Harrar, the former of whom had killed Tsavong Lah in personal combat, and the latter of whom had disappeared off Yuuzhan'tar around the time of the Second Battle of Bilbringi."
        • Chack got this one.
    • Also, File:TUF2 cover JPm.jpg should specify that it's from the Japanese cover, not the US one, to avoid confusion.
      • Done.
    • --LtNOWIS 21:14, 20 October 2008 (UTC)
  3. From Graestan the Cruel:
    • Is the Jaamane Coup really referred to as such, capitalization and all, in the sources? If not, please rename it in the article. The answer to this question will also lead me to move the coup's article and slap a {{conjecture}} on it.
      • Conjectural title; nom's been changed, article moved and conjecture tag added.
    • Are we going to italicize Koros-strohna or not? It's in there both ways.
      • I can't find any italicized version of it. Could you point me toward it?
        • I un-italicized one, that's all there was. There are currently three, I believe, instances of it without italics. Graestan(Talk) 16:01, 5 November 2008 (UTC)
          • I think I may have gotten all of them a few days ago. Chack Jadson (Talk) 20:11, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
            • Checking the NEGTD, Koros-strohna should be italicized so I've changed it.
    • Same goes for the rest of the bioship names.
      • Do you mean the individual ship names or their type or what? Looking through the article and making use of ctrl+f I can't find any instance where a ship name isn't italicized. Having not written the article I can't say there's none for sure but if you could be more specific it should help me fix any problems.
        • The class names. To be honest, I'd like to see them all italicized, since we're dealing with words in an alien language. Graestan(Talk) 16:01, 5 November 2008 (UTC)
          • They're not italicized in the novels or the New Essential Guide to Vessels and Vehicles and Harrar's other YV FAs have created a precedent not to do so, so I think we shouldn't italicize. Having just read through it and utilized ctrl+f, they should all be good now. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:26, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
    • Graestan(Talk) 20:08, 22 October 2008 (UTC)

Comments

  • I've done what I can with pictures, but there is only one of Nas Choka himself. Others, like the Battle of Coruscant, will need to be cropped to remove the hand. I was thinking of one of Shimrra Jamaane, but if you look at his article all of his images are rather poor. Help would be greatly appreciated Harrar 16:55, 16 August 2008 (UTC)
    • I'm now away until the 10th of September, with precious little internet access. I'll deal with any objections on my return. Harrar 10:41, 21 August 2008 (UTC)
      • It sucks to pull out of this with only one Inqvote and one set of objections, because it means it probably won't pass without my hand to resolve them. That's by no means an indictment of the process here; it's a massive article, and I know Yuuzhan Vong can be pretty boring. I don't really want to remove the nomination, though, (but that's probably what will happen in my absence). I dunno, maybe someone will get involved in the process and take up the burden of resolving the objs. If not, then I'm sorry to prat around on the FANom page, and guess you guys can remove the nom. I won't be working on the article again, but even if it does go down as a failed candidate, I'm happy that it's better than what it was. Apologies again. Harrar 11:35, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
        • Just to note: I intend to look after this nom and see to any objections in Harrar's absence. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:16, 30 September 2008 (UTC)
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 20:22, 8 November 2008 (UTC)