Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Mission to Monastery

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Mission to Monastery

• Nominated by: QuiGonJinn^{Be mindful of the Living Force...} 10:14, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Freshly GAed.

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Thefourdotelipsis 06:24, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
2. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 00:27, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
3. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 14:02, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
4. Lord Hydronium 02:54, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
5. —Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 06:03, 19 April 2009 (UTC)

Oppose

1. Company Commander:
   • Intro should be broken in two paragraphs at least.
     • Done.
   • Is there no article for the duel between Skywalker & Vader?
     • Umm, there wasn't any duel between Skywalker and Vader. The one that happened was between Skywalker and Tagge and I don't think it warrants its own article, especially since the whole duel is already described in the "Skirmish in the Crystal Valley" section.
       • The way it is written (shown in the objection after next) leads one to believe that Luke fought Vader here. Is this not the case?
         • Rewritten. Take a look at it now.
   • If this is a mission, how come you're not using the mission infobox?
     • Bah, completely forgot about that. Addressed.
   • "Meanwhile, Skywalker met Vader and was forced to accept a duel with him. However, Organa had unwittingly brought Domina's brother and former baron of the House of Tagge, Orman Tagge to Monastery, whom Vader used to test Luke's mastery of the Force. Skywalker killed Orman, who was disguised as Vader…" Did he duel Vader or Tagge, or Tagge disguised as Vader only, or both? Whatever the case is, it needs to be less ambiguous.
     • Reworded. QuiGonJinn^{There's always a bigger fish.} 17:42, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
   • The "Background" section needs to be broken up into at least two paragraphs.
     • Done.
   • You mentioned several times about Skywalkers suspicion of Vader clouding Domina's mind. Is this not a mind trick?
     • It's not referred to as such in the comic, IIRC. It's more vague. Thefourdotelipsis
       • Cool.—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 17:05, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
   • Is the "Skirmish in the Crystal Valley" part of the mission? If so, it needs to be made into a subsection, & the paragraphs under "mission" need to be in their own subsection also.
     • Addressed. QuiGonJinn^{There's always a bigger fish.} 15:17, 15 April 2009 (UTC)
   • No aftermath section?
     • If I may say so, I think that the aftermath is basically covered in the last paragraph of the "Mission" section. Thefourdotelipsis 06:24, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
       • Then maybe Master Jinn should to turn that paragraph into an "aftermath" section. Thoughts, Fourdot?—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 17:05, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
         • Nevermind. Master Jinn has already taken care of this.—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 17:35, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
   • I really liked this.—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 12:29, 3 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments

• Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 06:03, 19 April 2009 (UTC)