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Laddinare Torbin
(6 Inqs/1 User/7 Total)
Support
- -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:11, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
Objections resolved over IRC. The Inq shall never relinquish their powah! Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:09, 18 April 2008 (UTC)- Greyman
(Talk) 18:32, 20 April 2008 (UTC) - NNOOO-body exPECTs the Imperial Inquisition! -- Darth Culator (Talk) 02:43, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
Graestan(Talk) 21:23, 23 April 2008 (UTC)- Thefourdotelipsis 13:09, 24 April 2008 (UTC)
- Chack Jadson (Talk) 12:32, 26 April 2008 (UTC)
Oppose
- Just one thing.
"Torbin, fearing for his life, wrested the air tubes from several other beings, one of which was his own bodyguard." This quote, in the second-to-last paragraph of Assassination is very similar to the quote in P&T. Please change the phrasing a bit. Chack Jadson (Talk) 21:36, 22 April 2008 (UTC)- Fixed. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:51, 23 April 2008 (UTC)
- From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
"hunt down the Jedi, whom Torbin once served alongside, and who were still alive during the Great Jedi Purge." – Implies that the whole Order was still intact."he also commanded over a dozen lesser Inquisitors" – Was the Inquisitorius not structured in a way that, as Grand Inquisitor, Torbin would command all the lesser Inquisitors?"Imperial enemies" can imply enemies who are Imperial, which is not correct in this instance.Using the same phrase "elicit a confession" in the prose after supplying it in a quote is a bit repetitive.The First Great Schism and the Legions of Lettow need a bit of context."among the more unpopular among the ranks" – Could be smoothed out.- Graestan(Talk) 02:06, 23 April 2008 (UTC)
- Should be all sorted. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:51, 23 April 2008 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 13:00, 26 April 2008 (UTC)