Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Knol Ven'nari

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Knol Ven'nari

(4 Inqs/5 Users/9 Total)

Support

  1. Pre-nom reviewed. —Master Jonathan New Jedi Order (Jedi Council Chambers) 04:12, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Oh man, I pre-nommed her so hard, she won't be able to sit for a week. Menkooroo 04:56, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 20:13, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Cool if all the nomads are featured one after another.ToRsO bOy 04:52, June 29, 2010 (UTC)
  5. Thefourdotelipsis 10:10, June 29, 2010 (UTC)
  6. Inqvote CC7567 (talk) 07:21, July 4, 2010 (UTC)
  7. Inqvote You at Kinko's straight flippin' copies! Chack Jadson (Talk) 14:59, July 4, 2010 (UTC)
  8. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 18:32, July 4, 2010 (UTC)
  9. Inqvote I know my vote isn't needed, but I had expressed my intention to review this and wanted to follow up. — Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 16:41, July 5, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Le Dot Quatre
  • Just a smidge of intro condensation wouldn't go away. Try to avoid detail in these things.
    • Better? And I'll try to get better at this, just hard, you know?--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 06:48, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
      • Eh, I think it could still stand to be condensed more. Basically, try and cover events in broader terms, instead of focusing on the specifics. Thefourdotelipsis 09:23, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
  • That's all. Thefourdotelipsis 06:32, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
Xicer
  • The caption for the first image is exactly the same as a sentence from the intro, and similar to another in the bio. Could you reword it slightly?
  • That's it, but I concur with 4dot on the intro. Similar to Diath, the circumstances surrounded Ven'nari's death could be cut down to one sentence (she drew the fire toward herself and was killed in the process) and again, Kenobi's survival and the memorial could be combined into one sentence as well. Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 15:46, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
    • Better? And thanks for the review, Xicer.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:24, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
      • I still think it could be shortened slightly, per my last comment on Diath's nom page, but I think it's been shortened enough to satisfy this objection. Xicer9Atgar(Combadge) 20:13, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
ToRsO bOy
  • After she questioned Antilles's involvement in the mission, Ven'nari and the Masters successfully infiltrated the mobile Separatist base. Can an explanation be given as to what caused Ven'nari's objection to Antilles's presence? Or what was the result of her objection? It seems like the part is incomplete then it jumps into the part where they sneak into the facility. ToRsO bOy 22:08, June 28, 2010 (UTC)
    • Please try it. Thanks for the review.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:10, June 29, 2010 (UTC)
The clone
  • Only one minor one: like Diath, please clarify the inconsistent Mission to Queyta/mission to Queyta capitalization. CC7567 (talk) 05:39, July 3, 2010 (UTC)
Trayus
  • In the intro, can you specify where and when the holomemorial took place in that last sentence?
  • That's it. Well done. Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 18:01, July 4, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 16:41, July 5, 2010 (UTC)