- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Kithriss
- Nominated by: Jinzler 22:05, November 15, 2011 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: An Imperial baron
(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)
Support
IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:43, November 18, 2011 (UTC)- Menkooroo 21:40, January 30, 2012 (UTC)
- —Cal Jedi
(Personal Comm Channel) 03:27, February 15, 2012 (UTC) 
Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:30, February 26, 2012 (UTC)- 1358 (Talk) 21:30, March 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Plagueis327 04:38, March 5, 2012 (UTC)
Object
Floyd:
Intro: "A devoted follower of Emperor Palpatine, the leader of the Empire, Kithriss spent several weeks on the planet Byss at Palpatine's request" When was this? Clarify. The same thing applies during this episode's mention in the body. A general timeframe would suffice if available.- Done --Jinzler 19:16, November 17, 2011 (UTC)
Not necessarily an objection: Do you think that the fight between Kithriss, his entourage and the Alderaanian Resistance is substantial enough to warrant its own article?- The fight between Kithriss and the Resistance is one of a number of such minor skirmishes that take place on Cloud City during the events of The Queen of Air and Darkness while the player characters investigate the activities of Darga the Hutt, which eventually culminates in a battle at the adventure. Rather than giving each of the skirmishes articles of their own, I believe that it would be more beneficial to view them as part of the events leading up to the battle and as such, they should be mentioned in the battle's article. At some point over the next few days, I will expand the battle's article and add a relevant sub-section for Kithriss' skirmish that we can link to. --Jinzler 19:16, November 17, 2011 (UTC)
Any more info on the "clandestine Imperial project"?- Added --Jinzler 19:16, November 17, 2011 (UTC)
- Nice work. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 03:00, November 17, 2011 (UTC)
- Thank you for your review. --Jinzler 19:16, November 17, 2011 (UTC)
Question
- Great work.
Just one question: After stealing Kithriss's datapad, do the Alderaanian agents prevent the transaction from taking place or interfere with it in any way? If so, can you note that at the end of the bio? It would seem notable to Kithriss since it would be a result of him losing the datapad, I think.Menkooroo 20:40, January 30, 2012 (UTC)- I have now stated in article the that the agents subsequently infiltrated the sabacc tournament. While the transaction does fail to take place, it is not the player characters that prevent it from happening and I don't won't to complicate the article by going into the details of the plot twist. Also, just so that you know, I have fixed a factual inaccuracy that was present in the article; it seems that the source just compares Kithriss to a member of the Imperial Senate, rather than stating that he actually was a member of the Senate. Thank you for your review and please let me know if any further changes are required. --Jinzler 21:23, January 30, 2012 (UTC)
Toprawa
Instead of guesswork, might we just say something like "around 19 BBY," or maybe even detail what the refnote says? Something like "following the inauguration of the Empire in 19 BBY, etc." here and in the bio? "...at some point during or after 19 BBY"- Yeah, I wasn't entirely comfortable with that either. That particular phrase was not present in the article when I first nominated it, and was added during another user's copy-edit. In the original wording, I didn't apply a date here, because the source is a bit vague about when Kithriss' trip to Byss took place. However, I guess that use of the 19 BBY date can be justified to give a rough idea of the time-frame in which his visit took place, because we know that he went to Byss at some point after the formation of the Empire and at some point before the events of the role-playing adventure, in about 17 BBY. I have now-rephrased it, so it should hopefully be fine now. --Jinzler 20:53, February 26, 2012 (UTC)
I think I would recommend seeing if you could find a place for a paragraph break in the last paragraph of the bio.- Done --Jinzler 20:53, February 26, 2012 (UTC)
Redlinks for these characters at least? "and loudly berated one of the hotel employees, demanding that the hotel manager allocate him a better room."Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:07, February 26, 2012 (UTC)- I have now added a redlink for the hotel employee. I have not added one for the manager because the single mention that the manager receives is "he [Kithriss] demands that the hotel manager put him in a better room." This seems to me to be a case of an angry customer shouting something along the lines of "I demand to see the manager," in reference to the position of manager, rather than to any specific individual manager. Given the tenous nature of the mention, I don't believe that a redlink can be justified. What do you think? --Jinzler 20:53, February 26, 2012 (UTC)
- That sounds fair. Thanks. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:30, February 26, 2012 (UTC)
- I have now added a redlink for the hotel employee. I have not added one for the manager because the single mention that the manager receives is "he [Kithriss] demands that the hotel manager put him in a better room." This seems to me to be a case of an angry customer shouting something along the lines of "I demand to see the manager," in reference to the position of manager, rather than to any specific individual manager. Given the tenous nature of the mention, I don't believe that a redlink can be justified. What do you think? --Jinzler 20:53, February 26, 2012 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 04:48, March 5, 2012 (UTC)