Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Keshiri/Legends

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Keshiri

• Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 02:20, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: My first ever species nom; a Legacy/Aliens crossover, from Lost Tribe & Fate of the Jedi

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)

Support

1. Thanks for the crossover! --Eyrezer 22:05, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
   • No prob—it was fun; I'll probably be doing some more species articles in the future :) Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 23:00, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
2. Nice job! ~ SavageBob 00:32, October 23, 2009 (UTC)
3. Grunny ^(Talk) 09:06, October 24, 2009 (UTC)
4. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 01:01, October 30, 2009 (UTC)
5. — Fiolli ^{{Alpheridies University ComNet}} 01:04, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
6. Jedi Kasra (comlink) 21:49, November 7, 2009 (UTC)
7. Dammit Kasra & the Edit conflict ;)—Tommy9281 ^{(No truth in me)} 22:17, November 7, 2009 (UTC)

Object

1. Two small points. According to the Atlas Online Companion, Kesh is in Wild Space, not the ORT. Which is correct? With regard to the Great Hyperspace War, I don't think it is accurate to say the rest of the galaxy was razed by it. From what I understand, it was a lot more limited than many other galactic conflicts. --Eyrezer 13:18, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
   • It seems I misread something: in Omen Rhea and Khai are in the ORT when they feel Skywalker's presence, however this was while they were abroad, working for the armada, rather than on Kesh. Both addressed; thanks for the review. Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 16:53, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
2. Prepare to be savaged..
   • Can you provide context for "uvak" on its first mention rather than later?
   • Otherwise, an excellent article. Glad to see an alien from you! ~ SavageBob 23:26, October 22, 2009 (UTC)
     • Addressed; thanks for the review! Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 23:55, October 22, 2009 (UTC)
3. Grunny:
   • I'm easy on this, but in the first paragraph of "Society and culture" there are three sentences in close proximity that start pretty similarly: "The Keshiri believed that the Skyborn" "The Keshiri believed that the Skyborn" "As such, the Keshiri believed that the". Could you vary this a little?
     • Addressed.
   • Just as a note, watch your comma use. When using a conjunction to join two thoughts into a single sentence, you should only use a comma if both parts of the sentence can stand alone and make sense as complete sentences. Otherwise, great job as always :). Grunny ^(Talk) 13:25, October 23, 2009 (UTC)
     • Noted; thanks for the review! Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 18:19, October 23, 2009 (UTC)
4. A note from IFYLOFD:
   • One thing: "The Keshiri religion and government was led by the Neshtovar, who believed in the importance of tradition and religion above science and technological progress." A little context here: Is the Neshtovar one person, or a group? Other than that, good job. IFYLOFD ^{(You will pay the price for your lack of vision!)} 23:12, October 23, 2009 (UTC)
     • Addressed; thanks for the review Jonjedigrandmaster ^{(Jedi Beacon)} 23:17, October 23, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

• Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 22:17, November 7, 2009 (UTC)